Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议使用更地道的表达方式，并且避免冗余。可以简洁明了地说明做拼图的经历和益处。

例: Yes, I used to do puzzles a lot when I was a child because they helped me develop logical thinking and improve my intelligence.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达有些混乱。建议直接回答问题，并用连接词使句子更流畅，同时避免语法错误。

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored because during trips, I prefer to enjoy the beautiful scenery and interesting activities.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地表达喜好和原因，使用恰当的词汇和句式。

例: I prefer number puzzles because I'm good with numbers, which is why I didn't major in accounting. Word puzzles are harder for me since I can't find connections quickly and they can be boring.

提案: 回答语法错误严重，表达不清晰。建议用更准确的句子表达观点，并说明原因和结果，使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes, I think puzzles are good for elderly people because they help keep the brain active and improve memory, which can prevent forgetfulness.

× Yes, in my childhood, my parents would like to buy a lot of puzzle to me, this thing it just can practice my logical thinking and stimulate the intelligence.

✓ Yes, in my childhood, my parents would like to buy a lot of puzzles for me; these things can practice my logical thinking and stimulate my intelligence.

这里“puzzle”应使用复数形式“puzzles”，因为表示多个拼图游戏。并且“a lot of”后面应接复数名词。

× Yes, in my childhood, my parents would like to buy a lot of puzzle to me, this thing it just can practice my logical thinking and stimulate the intelligence.

✓ Yes, in my childhood, my parents would like to buy a lot of puzzles for me; these things can practice my logical thinking and stimulate my intelligence.

动词“buy”后面接人时应使用介词“for”，表示为某人买东西。

× Yes, in my childhood, my parents would like to buy a lot of puzzle to me, this thing it just can practice my logical thinking and stimulate the intelligence.

✓ Yes, in my childhood, my parents would like to buy a lot of puzzles for me; these things can practice my logical thinking and stimulate my intelligence.

句中“this thing it”重复使用主语，应去掉“it”或改为“these things”，使句子通顺。

× Absolutely, I play puzzle when I feel bored because when I was traveling there are so many beautiful things waiting for me.

✓ Absolutely, I play puzzles when I feel bored because when I am traveling there are so many beautiful things waiting for me.

描述习惯动作用一般现在时，“play puzzle”应为“play puzzles”，且“when I was traveling”应改为“when I am traveling”保持时态一致。

× Absolutely, I play puzzle when I feel bored because when I was traveling there are so many beautiful things waiting for me.

✓ Absolutely, I play puzzles when I feel bored because when I am traveling there are so many beautiful things waiting for me.

“puzzle”应使用复数形式“puzzles”，表示泛指拼图游戏。

× So I just prefer you spend time on the beautiful scenery and interesting activities.

✓ So I just prefer to spend time on the beautiful scenery and interesting activities.

“prefer”后面应接动词不定式“to spend”，而不是“you spend”，这里主语应是说话者自己。

× I prefer the number puzzle because I'm good at process the number.

✓ I prefer number puzzles because I'm good at processing numbers.

“number puzzle”应为复数“number puzzles”，且“process the number”应改为动名词形式“processing numbers”。

× I prefer the number puzzle because I'm good at process the number.

✓ I prefer number puzzles because I'm good at processing numbers.

介词“at”后应接动名词形式“processing”，而不是动词原形“process”。

× That's why I'm not as major in accounting.

✓ That's why I didn't major in accounting.

“not as major”表达错误，应使用过去时态“didn't major”表示过去没有主修会计。

× That's why I'm not as major in accounting.

✓ That's why I didn't major in accounting.

描述过去的动作应使用过去时态，“I'm not as major”时态和表达均不正确。

× And a word puzzle is a little bit hard for me.

✓ And word puzzles are a little bit hard for me.

“word puzzle”应使用复数形式“word puzzles”，因为泛指多种文字谜题。

× I I cannot find the connection immediately.

✓ I cannot find the connection immediately.

重复使用“I”是多余的，应删除重复部分。

× I have to spend a lot of time and I think it's just very bored.

✓ I have to spend a lot of time and I think it's just very boring.

“bored”是形容人的情绪，表示“感到无聊”；“boring”是形容事物，表示“令人无聊”，此处应使用“boring”。

× Now yes, nowadays old people are easy to forget something.

✓ Yes, nowadays old people easily forget things.

“are easy to forget”表达不自然，应使用副词“easily forget”表示容易忘记。

× It is because they just let's use their brain, their brain have no get enough practice.

✓ It is because they just don't use their brains; their brains don't get enough practice.

“let's”是“let us”的缩写，使用错误，应改为“don't use”；“brain”应复数“brains”；“have no get”语法错误，应改为“don't get”。

× It is because they just let's use their brain, their brain have no get enough practice.

✓ It is because they just don't use their brains; their brains don't get enough practice.

“brain”应使用复数形式“brains”，因为指的是多个人的大脑。

× So if they play puzzle, I think this question will be solved or just become better.

✓ So if they play puzzles, I think this problem will be solved or will just get better.

“play puzzle”应为复数“play puzzles”；“question”用词不当，应为“problem”；“become better”前应加助动词“will”保持时态一致。