Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ, ví dụ như thiếu từ "did" trong "I when I was a kid". Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ như "puzzles" quá nhiều. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, when I was a child, I often did puzzles such as animal and picture puzzles. They helped me improve my logical thinking and concentration, which benefited my studies later on.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "smartphone have" nên là "smartphones have" hoặc "a smartphone has". Câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn và rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để câu mạch lạc.

例: I usually do puzzles during trips or when I feel bored. Although I could use my smartphone to relax, I prefer puzzles because the screen's blue light can strain my eyes, and puzzles help me relax while improving my logical skills.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ "word puzzle" nên là "word puzzles". Câu trả lời có thể rõ ràng hơn và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "viral elements". Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và giải thích rõ hơn về sở thích của bạn.

例: I don't enjoy word or number puzzles much because I find them quite difficult. Instead, I prefer picture puzzles since they are easier to understand and more enjoyable for me.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ "need actives" nên là "need activities" và "Active doing your puzzles have improved" không đúng cấu trúc. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và chính xác hơn.

例: I believe puzzles are very beneficial for older people because they have more free time and need activities to keep their minds active. Doing puzzles can improve their memory and thinking skills, which helps maintain good mental health.

× Yes, I when I was a kid I usually did puzzles like animals, puzzles related to picture puzzles or some easy word puzzle.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I usually did puzzles like animal puzzles, picture puzzles, or some easy word puzzles.

The original sentence has a misplaced 'I' and inconsistent plural forms. 'Animals' should be 'animal puzzles' to clarify meaning, and 'word puzzle' should be plural to match the list. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Puzzles help me to improve my logical thinking and my coherence, so it helped me to study better in the future.

✓ Puzzles helped me to improve my logical thinking and my coherence, so they helped me to study better in the future.

The verb tense should be past tense 'helped' to match 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'it' is incorrect referring to 'puzzles' (plural), so it should be 'they'. This corrects subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference.

× Although I can use smartphone to relax but I prefer to use puzzles more than smartphone because smartphone have green light that can affect a lot on my eyes and puzzles help me to relax and improve my logical.

✓ Although I can use a smartphone to relax, I prefer to use puzzles more than a smartphone because smartphones have green light that can affect my eyes a lot, and puzzles help me to relax and improve my logic.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'can' and 'but' together; 'although' and 'but' should not be used simultaneously. Also, 'smartphone' needs an article 'a' and plural form 'smartphones' when generalizing. 'Affect a lot on my eyes' is incorrect; it should be 'affect my eyes a lot'. 'Improve my logical' is incorrect; it should be 'improve my logic'.

× I don't enjoy either word puzzle or number puzzles because I find them both quite challenging and difficult to solve.

✓ I don't enjoy either word puzzles or number puzzles because I find them both quite challenging and difficult to solve.

The phrase 'either word puzzle or number puzzles' is inconsistent in number. Both should be plural 'word puzzles' and 'number puzzles' to match 'them both' and maintain parallel structure.

× Everything in that puzzles is more enjoyable.

✓ Everything in those puzzles is more enjoyable.

'That puzzles' is incorrect because 'puzzles' is plural and requires the plural demonstrative pronoun 'those'. 'That' is singular.

× ...and need actives to keep their mind active.

✓ ...and need activities to keep their mind active.

'Actives' is not a correct noun; the correct word is 'activities'. This corrects the noun form to fit the context.

× Active doing your puzzles have improved their memories and thinking skills, which can boost their mental health.

✓ Actively doing puzzles has improved their memories and thinking skills, which can boost their mental health.

'Active doing your puzzles' is incorrect; the adverb 'actively' should modify 'doing'. Also, 'have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'doing puzzles'. 'Your' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.