Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and concise answer directly addressing the question. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. For example, start with a direct statement and then provide a brief explanation.

例: No, I didn't play puzzles much in my childhood because my parents were very strict and focused mainly on my studies, so I didn't have much time for games like puzzles.

提案: Focus on organizing your answer logically and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use precise vocabulary to express your thoughts effectively.

例: I usually do puzzles during trips because they help me stay focused and make the travel experience more enjoyable and productive. Additionally, they help pass the time when I feel bored.

提案: Try to reduce hesitation and filler words. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons. Use appropriate vocabulary to express your preferences and difficulties clearly.

例: I prefer word puzzles because I find them more interesting and enjoyable. Number puzzles are more difficult for me since I often get confused with the calculations involved.

提案: Provide a clear and direct answer with supporting reasons. Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe puzzles are beneficial for older people because they help improve concentration and keep the mind active. This mental exercise can prevent cognitive decline and keep them engaged.

× I didn't get offer to play puzzles in my childhood.

✓ I didn't get an offer to play puzzles in my childhood.

The sentence is missing the article 'an' before the noun 'offer'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article or determiner. Adding 'an' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× My I, I come from a strict background that I that my parents don't usually let me to do puzzle games but they get more concentrated and strict in about studies.

✓ I come from a strict background where my parents don't usually let me play puzzle games, but they are more focused and strict about studies.

The original sentence has redundant and incorrect pronouns ('My I, I') and awkward phrasing. 'Let me to do' is incorrect; 'let' is followed by the base verb without 'to'. Also, 'get more concentrated and strict in about studies' is incorrect; it should be 'are more focused and strict about studies' for clarity and correctness.

× So puzzle was not my childhood game.

✓ So puzzles were not my childhood games.

The noun 'puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles' to match the context of games in childhood. Also, 'was' should be 'were' to agree with the plural subject 'puzzles'.

× I enjoy doing puzzles during trip because it keeps my mind concentrate and umm driven.

✓ I enjoy doing puzzles during trips because it keeps my mind concentrated and driven.

The phrase 'during trip' should be 'during trips' to indicate general occasions. Also, 'keeps my mind concentrate' is incorrect; the correct form is 'keeps my mind concentrated' using the past participle as an adjective.

× Bro boredom and additionally solving puzzles happens my mind umm and it also umm make the travel experience more enjoyable and productive.

✓ When bored, solving puzzles also happens in my mind and it makes the travel experience more enjoyable and productive.

The original sentence is unclear and has incorrect prepositions and verb forms. 'Bro boredom' is unclear; 'When bored' is clearer. 'Solving puzzles happens my mind' is incorrect; it should be 'solving puzzles also happens in my mind'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× I like, uh, word puzzles because word puzzles, I found it more, uh, interesting and more enjoyable, but I found number puzzles very difficult because I'm just, too, uh, confused that number puzzling things.

✓ I like word puzzles because I find them more interesting and enjoyable, but I find number puzzles very difficult because I get too confused with number puzzling things.

The sentence has tense inconsistency ('found' should be 'find' to match present tense). Also, 'confused that number puzzling things' is incorrect; it should be 'confused with number puzzling things'. Pronouns and verb forms are corrected for clarity and grammar.

× So I prefer, uh, word puzzles for myself.

✓ So I prefer word puzzles for myself.

The sentence is mostly correct; removing unnecessary fillers improves clarity. 'For myself' is acceptable but can be omitted for conciseness.

× I think it is good for the old people to do puzzles because puzzles keep our mind concentrations and umm, it keeps our minds opens, uh, to do something.

✓ I think it is good for old people to do puzzles because puzzles keep our minds concentrated and open to do something.

'The old people' should be 'old people' as a general group. 'Mind concentrations' is incorrect; it should be 'minds concentrated'. 'Minds opens' should be 'minds open' to use the correct adjective form.

× So, uh, as, as uh, world people get uh, more lost in other things, like they cannot concentrate in some things.

✓ So, as people get more lost in other things, they cannot concentrate on some things.

'World people' is awkward; 'people' suffices. 'Concentrate in' should be 'concentrate on' as the correct preposition with 'concentrate'.

× Uh, so I think they should.

✓ So, I think they should do puzzles.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object. Adding 'do puzzles' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.