Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two specific supporting details. Also, watch for grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer and more natural.

例: Yes, I enjoyed doing puzzles in my childhood. They helped me develop critical thinking skills and kept me mentally active, which I still benefit from today.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and includes filler words like 'uh' and 'man'. Try to avoid fillers and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific details. This will make your response more fluent and natural.

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored or have free time. I enjoy solving puzzles from my collection of books and online, which I do almost every day because it makes me feel happy and accomplished.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar phrases.

例: I enjoy both word and number puzzles, but I prefer number puzzles because I love math. Although they are more challenging, I like the difficulty as it helps me improve every day.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use clear and correct sentences, and avoid incomplete thoughts. Also, provide specific reasons why puzzles are beneficial for older people, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I believe puzzles are beneficial for older people because they help keep the brain active and improve memory. Regularly doing puzzles can make them feel more energetic and mentally sharp.

× Yes, I did lots of puzzles in my childhood but also I do many puzzles and games that are logical nowadays too to increase my IQ level, to increase my intelligence and also it really helps me in making me critically and logically strong and also helps me in making and taking good decisions in my life.

✓ Yes, I did lots of puzzles in my childhood but also I do many puzzles and games that are logical nowadays too to increase my IQ level, to increase my intelligence and also it really helps me make me critically and logically strong and also helps me make and take good decisions in my life.

The phrase 'helps me in making me critically and logically strong' is incorrect because 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to' or 'in'. The correct form is 'helps me make me critically and logically strong'. Using 'in making' is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect here.

× Also it really make me feel more energetic, more productive.

✓ Also it really makes me feel more energetic, more productive.

The verb 'make' should agree with the singular subject 'it', so it should be 'makes' (third person singular). This is a subject-verb agreement issue (ID 27), but since the problem is with the verb form, it is categorized here. The verb must be in the correct present tense form to match the subject.

× Yes, when I feel bored and I have nothing to do.

✓ Yes, I do puzzles when I feel bored and have nothing to do.

The original sentence is a fragment and does not answer the question directly. It lacks a main verb related to the action of doing puzzles. The corrected sentence completes the thought and provides a full response.

× So I definitely do puzzles also online.

✓ So I definitely do puzzles online as well.

The placement of 'also' is awkward. 'Also' should be placed before the verb or replaced with 'as well' at the end for natural English sentence structure.

× And also I have really, uh, a big collection of books of puzzles.

✓ And also, I have a big collection of puzzle books.

The phrase 'books of puzzles' is awkward; the correct noun phrase is 'puzzle books'. Also, 'really, uh,' is unnecessary filler and can be omitted for clarity.

× Uh, so I do that really often, like every day I do puzzles and uh, man, that makes me feel happy and I'm so proud that I can do that puzzle whenever I finish the exercise.

✓ So I do that really often; like every day, I do puzzles, and that makes me feel happy. I'm so proud that I can solve that puzzle whenever I finish the exercise.

The sentence is run-on and contains filler words ('uh', 'man') that should be removed for clarity. Also, 'do that puzzle' is awkward; 'solve that puzzle' is more appropriate.

× Although both puzzles are really good and nice, but I enjoy numbers puzzling because I am a number person.

✓ Although both puzzles are really good and nice, I enjoy number puzzles because I am a number person.

Using both 'although' and 'but' together is redundant and incorrect. One conjunction should be used. Also, 'numbers puzzling' is incorrect; 'number puzzles' is the correct noun phrase.

× And also number puzzles are more difficult than word puzzles.

✓ Also, number puzzles are more difficult than word puzzles.

Starting a sentence with 'And also' is redundant. 'Also' alone is sufficient to connect ideas.

× But I am the person who want difficulties and try to improve myself every single day.

✓ But I am the person who wants difficulties and tries to improve myself every single day.

The relative clause 'who want difficulties' requires the verb to agree with the singular subject 'who' referring to 'person'. Therefore, 'want' should be 'wants' and 'try' should be 'tries'.

× Yes, buses are really good for old people as it's good for every age of life, but for old people their brain becomes really tired of their lives and also it's not in good in proper working conditions.

✓ Yes, puzzles are really good for old people as they're good for every age of life, but for old people, their brains become really tired from their lives and also are not in good working condition.

The word 'buses' is incorrect; it should be 'puzzles'. Also, 'brain' should be plural 'brains' to agree with 'old people'. The phrase 'not in good in proper working conditions' is awkward and corrected to 'not in good working condition'.

× but for old people their brain becomes really tired of their lives and also it's not in good in proper working conditions.

✓ but for old people, their brains become really tired from their lives and also are not in good working condition.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect after 'tired'; the correct preposition is 'from'. Also, 'in good in proper' is redundant; 'in good working condition' is correct.

× So I feel like all people have to do puzzles on every single day, even just a little to make their self more productive, energetic and.

✓ So I feel like all people have to do puzzles every single day, even just a little, to make themselves more productive and energetic.

The phrase 'on every single day' should be 'every single day' without 'on'. 'Their self' is incorrect; the correct reflexive pronoun is 'themselves'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' which is incomplete and corrected by removing it.