Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but avoid using overly formal or uncommon words like 'plethora' in casual conversation. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and natural by removing unnecessary words such as 'on playing them'.

例: I did many puzzles when I was young. I especially enjoyed number puzzles like Sudoku and could spend hours playing them. I also liked jigsaw puzzles and crosswords because they were fun.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid repeating the same idea twice, such as 'when I feel bored' and 'help me feel less bored'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and vary your vocabulary to sound more natural.

例: I do puzzles both during long trips, like flights or train rides, and whenever I feel bored. They help me pass the time and keep my mind occupied.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Avoid awkward phrases like 'The puzzles I enjoy a number of puzzles much more' and 'get read results'. Also, use correct plural forms and articles, e.g., 'vocabulary' is uncountable. Try to structure your answer clearly with linking words.

例: I prefer number puzzles because they require logical and strategic thinking, which makes them more challenging and exciting. On the other hand, I find word puzzles more difficult since my English vocabulary is limited.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and relevant. To improve, use more precise vocabulary and avoid informal phrases like 'kill the time'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe puzzles are beneficial for older people. Firstly, they help keep the brain active, which may reduce the risk of Alzheimer's disease or dementia. Furthermore, puzzles provide a stimulating activity that can alleviate boredom.

× I usually can spend a few hours on playing them.

✓ I can usually spend a few hours playing them.

The modal verb 'can' should be followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'on'. Also, the adverb 'usually' is better placed before 'can' for natural word order. Therefore, 'can usually spend' is correct, and 'on playing' should be 'playing'.

× I usually can spend a few hours on playing them.

✓ I can usually spend a few hours playing them.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used before the gerund 'playing'. The correct structure is to use the verb directly with the gerund without 'on'.

× Additionally, I also played jigsaw and crosswords which are quite fun as well.

✓ Additionally, I also played jigsaw puzzles and crosswords, which are quite fun as well.

The word 'jigsaw' should be followed by 'puzzles' to be clear and correct. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the relative clause.

× I tend to play puzzles to kill the time.

✓ I tend to play puzzles to kill time.

The phrase 'kill time' does not require the definite article 'the'. Using 'the' here is incorrect.

× I tend to play puzzles to kill the time.

✓ I tend to play puzzles to kill time.

The phrase 'kill time' is an idiomatic expression and does not take the definite article 'the'.

× I can focus on something else which can help me feel less bored.

✓ I can focus on something else, which can help me feel less bored.

A comma is needed before 'which' to introduce a non-restrictive relative clause.

× The puzzles I enjoy a number of puzzles much more because you actually need to play logically and strategically to get read results, which make it more challenging and exciting.

✓ I enjoy number puzzles much more because you actually need to play logically and strategically to get real results, which makes it more challenging and exciting.

The original sentence has redundancy and incorrect word order. 'The puzzles I enjoy a number of puzzles much more' is incorrect and should be 'I enjoy number puzzles much more'. Also, 'read results' is a typo and should be 'real results'. The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'which' referring to 'getting real results'.

× I personally found word puzzles are more difficult because I'm quite limited in English so I don't know that much vocabularies.

✓ I personally find word puzzles more difficult because I'm quite limited in English, so I don't know that much vocabulary.

The verb tense should be present 'find' to match the current opinion. 'Vocabularies' is incorrect; 'vocabulary' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralised. A comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.