Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to answer the question directly and clearly at the start, avoiding unnecessary hesitation and redundancy. Use simpler, more natural phrasing and correct grammar, for example, 'I didn't do puzzles much as a child because they weren't common where I grew up. Instead, I enjoyed outdoor games like hide and seek, volleyball, and badminton.'

例: I didn't do puzzles much as a child because they weren't common where I grew up. Instead, I enjoyed outdoor games like hide and seek, volleyball, and badminton, which were really fun.

提案: Focus on answering the question directly and use correct verb forms. Avoid repeating phrases and filler words. For example, say 'I usually do puzzles when I feel bored, especially after moving to Australia, although I don't do them very often.'

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored, especially after moving to Australia, although I don't do them very often.

提案: Answer clearly and use correct vocabulary ('number puzzles' not 'number modules'). Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure. For example, 'I find number puzzles more difficult, but I enjoy word puzzles because they are interesting and give a sense of accomplishment, which encourages me to play more.'

例: I find number puzzles more difficult, but I enjoy word puzzles because they are interesting and give a sense of accomplishment, which encourages me to play more.

提案: Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid hesitation. Use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, 'Definitely, puzzles help older people keep their minds active and calm, which is beneficial for their mental health.'

例: Definitely, puzzles help older people keep their minds active and calm, which is beneficial for their mental health.

× we were born and raised in a place where this kind of activities were not that common and stayed

✓ we were born and raised in a place where this kind of activity was not that common and stayed

The phrase 'this kind of activities' is incorrect because 'kind' is singular and should be followed by a singular noun 'activity'. Also, the verb 'were' should be 'was' to agree with the singular subject 'activity'. Suggestion: Use 'this kind of activity was' instead of 'this kind of activities were'.

× playing a volleyball and uh, also badminton

✓ playing volleyball and also badminton

The word 'volleyball' is an uncountable noun when referring to the sport, so the article 'a' is unnecessary. Saying 'a volleyball' implies a single ball, not the sport. Suggestion: Remove 'a' before 'volleyball' when referring to the sport.

× this kind of activities are not common

✓ this kind of activity is not common

Same as before, 'kind' is singular and should be followed by a singular noun 'activity' and singular verb 'is'. Suggestion: Use 'this kind of activity is' instead of 'this kind of activities are'.

× I have did some puzzles for game

✓ I have done some puzzles for fun

The verb 'did' is the simple past form, but after 'have' (present perfect), the past participle 'done' is required. Also, 'for game' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'for fun'. Suggestion: Use 'have done' and 'for fun'.

× it modules will hold their mind to be active

✓ it puzzles will hold their mind to be active

The word 'modules' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'puzzles'. Suggestion: Replace 'modules' with 'puzzles'.

× it modules will hold their mind to be active and uh, puzzle helps them to stay calm and active

✓ puzzles will help keep their minds active and puzzles help them to stay calm and active

'Modules' is incorrect; 'puzzles' is correct. Also, 'mind' should be plural 'minds' to agree with 'their'. The verb 'helps' should agree with plural 'puzzles' as 'help'. Suggestion: Use 'puzzles will help keep their minds active and puzzles help them to stay calm and active'.