Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding hesitations and repetitions. Also, use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying "I had not any expensive puzzle game games or a mobile phone on on which I can I could uh, play puzzle game," you could say "I didn't have expensive puzzle games or a mobile phone to play puzzles on."

例: Yes, I did puzzles in my childhood. I didn't have expensive puzzle games or a mobile phone to play puzzles on, but I used to enjoy solving puzzles in the newspaper.

提案: Improve your grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of "It also helpful in increasing the concentration," say "It also helps improve my concentration, so I can focus better on my work."

例: I do puzzles when I feel bored because they are a good exercise for my brain. Moreover, they help improve my concentration, which allows me to focus better on my work.

提案: Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear comparison and explanation. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, "I prefer word puzzles because they enhance my vocabulary. By doing them, I can learn new words and understand them better. However, I find number puzzles more difficult."

例: I prefer word puzzles because they enhance my vocabulary. By doing them, I can learn new words and understand their meanings better. However, I find number puzzles more challenging.

提案: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect your points. For example, "I think puzzles are good for older people because they exercise the brain. This helps improve their memory and concentration, enabling them to perform daily tasks more independently."

例: I think puzzles are good for older people because they exercise the brain. This helps improve their memory and concentration, enabling them to perform daily tasks more independently.

× Yes, I did puzzles in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I did puzzles in my childhood.

This sentence is correct in past tense as it refers to a completed action in the past.

× Uh, on that time I had not any expensive puzzle game games or a mobile phone on on which I can I could uh, play puzzle game, but whenever I saw newspaper.

✓ Uh, at that time I did not have any expensive puzzle games or a mobile phone on which I could play puzzle games, but whenever I saw the newspaper.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; 'at that time' is the correct phrase to refer to a specific time in the past. Also, 'had not any' is incorrect; 'did not have any' is the proper negative form in past tense. The repetition 'game games' is a mistake; 'puzzle games' is correct plural. 'Can I could' is redundant; 'could' is appropriate for past ability. 'Play puzzle game' should be plural 'play puzzle games' to match context. 'Saw newspaper' needs the definite article 'the' before 'newspaper'.

× I do possess when I feel bored.

✓ I do puzzles when I feel bored.

The word 'possess' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'puzzles'. Also, 'do puzzles' is the correct phrase to express the activity.

× It also helpful in increasing the concentration.

✓ It is also helpful in increasing concentration.

The verb 'is' is missing before 'also helpful'. 'The concentration' is incorrect; 'concentration' as an uncountable noun does not need 'the' here.

× I can be able to more concentrate on my work by playing this game.

✓ I am able to concentrate more on my work by playing this game.

The phrase 'can be able to' is redundant; 'am able to' is correct. The adverb 'more' should come after the verb 'concentrate' for correct word order.

× I like to do word puzzle because it enhance the, uh, my vocabulary.

✓ I like to do word puzzles because it enhances my vocabulary.

'Word puzzle' should be plural 'word puzzles' to match general activity. The verb 'enhance' needs an 's' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'the, uh, my vocabulary' is incorrect; 'my vocabulary' alone is correct.

× Uh, by doing the word puzzle I he can add more words in my vocabulary and can easily understand the words.

✓ By doing word puzzles, I can add more words to my vocabulary and can easily understand the words.

The pronoun 'I he' is incorrect; only 'I' is needed. 'Word puzzle' should be plural 'word puzzles'. The preposition 'in' should be 'to' when talking about adding words to vocabulary.

× Uh, I think both are.

✓ Uh, I think both are difficult.

The sentence is incomplete; it needs an adjective or complement to complete the thought.

× I think it's it is good for old people to do puzzles because it is a good exercise for their brain.

✓ I think it is good for old people to do puzzles because it is a good exercise for their brains.

The phrase 'it's it is' is redundant; only 'it is' is correct. 'Brain' should be plural 'brains' when referring to multiple people.

× They can easily remember things and it increase their concentration and they can easily do their work.

✓ They can easily remember things, and it increases their concentration, and they can easily do their work.

The verb 'increase' should be 'increases' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Commas are added for clarity.

× Their dependency is very less.

✓ Their dependency is very low.

'Less' is used for uncountable quantities without 'very'; 'low' is the correct adjective to describe 'dependency' here.