Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid repeating information. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I did puzzles when I was in primary school. A friend lent me his puzzles since we couldn't afford one, and I really enjoyed playing with them.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words to connect your thoughts. Also, avoid filler words and focus on clear, concise sentences.

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored, especially after spending a long time looking at my phone or reading books. They help me relax and pass the time.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct comparative forms and clarify your reasons with linking words. Also, be careful with word choice and spelling.

例: I prefer word puzzles to number puzzles because they are easier for me. Number puzzles seem abstract, and since I'm not good at math, I find word puzzles more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid ending sentences abruptly and ensure grammatical agreement.

例: I think puzzles are good for older people because they help reduce boredom and stimulate the brain. Additionally, puzzles can relieve stress, making them beneficial for mental health.

× Yes I did puzzles when I was I in primary school.

✓ Yes, I did puzzles when I was in primary school.

The sentence contains an extra 'I' which is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence structure and maintains the past tense appropriate for the context.

× I remember a friend of mine has puzzles and he lent that to me and I tried playing with it.

✓ I remember a friend of mine had puzzles and he lent them to me and I tried playing with them.

The verb 'has' should be in past tense 'had' to match the past context. Also, 'that' should be 'them' to correctly refer to the plural noun 'puzzles'. This corrects subject-verb agreement and pronoun usage.

× We were not able to afford 1 so I was just borrowing from a friend and it was a good experience.

✓ We were not able to afford one, so I was just borrowing from a friend and it was a good experience.

The number '1' should be written as 'one' in formal writing. Also, the sentence is correct in plural and singular forms here; no plural correction needed. The correction is mainly formatting and punctuation.

× I'm I'm not really into puzzles when but when I have it I usually do it when I feel bored except from my phone and books.

✓ I'm not really into puzzles, but when I have them, I usually do them when I feel bored, except for my phone and books.

The sentence has repeated 'I'm' and incorrect prepositions. 'When but' is incorrect; it should be 'but'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to puzzles (plural). 'Except from' should be 'except for'. These corrections fix tense, pronoun, and preposition errors.

× I do puzzles whenever my eyes start from looking at the phone or from the books.

✓ I do puzzles whenever my eyes start to get tired from looking at the phone or the books.

The phrase 'start from looking' is incorrect. It should be 'start to get tired from looking' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'from the books' is better as 'the books' without 'from' in this context.

× I like doing word puzzles than number puzzles because word puzzles is easier to play with, unlike with the number puzzles.

✓ I like doing word puzzles more than number puzzles because word puzzles are easier to play with, unlike number puzzles.

'Word puzzles is' is incorrect; it should be 'word puzzles are' to agree in number. Also, 'than' should be preceded by 'more' to form the comparative 'more than'. The phrase 'unlike with the number puzzles' is better as 'unlike number puzzles'.

× It seems like an abstract to me and I'm not really good with math and some sort of problem solving related to math, so I prefer world puzzles.

✓ It seems abstract to me and I'm not really good at math and some sort of problem solving related to math, so I prefer word puzzles.

'Like an abstract' is incorrect; 'abstract' is an adjective here, so 'seems abstract' is correct. 'Good with math' should be 'good at math'. Also, 'world puzzles' is a typo and should be 'word puzzles'.

× For me it is good for old people to do puzzles because it helps them with their boredom.

✓ For me, it is good for old people to do puzzles because it helps them with their boredom.

A comma after 'For me' improves readability. The pronouns are used correctly here; no change needed except punctuation.

× Also it stimulates their brain and help with their stress.

✓ Also, it stimulates their brain and helps with their stress.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Adding a comma after 'Also' improves sentence flow.

× So in conclusion, doing puzzles for old people is beneficial for their mind and it.

✓ So in conclusion, doing puzzles is beneficial for the minds of old people.

The phrase 'beneficial for their mind and it' is incomplete and awkward. Rephrasing to 'beneficial for the minds of old people' clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure.