Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good with clear structure and relevant content. However, try to avoid redundancy such as repeating 'puzzles' and 'solved them' closely. Also, use more varied vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I did. As a curious child, I found puzzles very rewarding because solving them gave me a great sense of achievement. Moreover, I enjoyed playing chess and solving the Rubik's Cube, both of which challenged my problem-solving skills and kept me engaged for hours.

提案: Your answer has several language errors and unclear phrases (e.g., 'pandas' instead of 'puzzles', 'throw puzzles'). Focus on clear, grammatically correct sentences and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Avoid repetition and ensure vocabulary is accurate.

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored because they help me concentrate and keep my mind active. For instance, during long trips or quiet evenings, I solve puzzles to pass the time and enjoy the sense of achievement they bring.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and does not address the question. Make sure to provide a full response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Explain your preference and which type you find more difficult, giving reasons.

例: I prefer doing word puzzles because I enjoy playing with language. However, I find number puzzles more difficult since they require more logical thinking and calculation skills.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not respond to the question. Provide a direct answer with supporting reasons or examples. Avoid unrelated or incomplete statements.

例: Yes, I believe puzzles are beneficial for older people because they help keep the mind sharp and improve memory. For example, many seniors enjoy crossword puzzles to stay mentally active.

× I usually do pandas when I feel bored.

✓ I usually do puzzles when I feel bored.

The word 'pandas' is a typographical error and should be 'puzzles' to correctly answer the question about doing puzzles. This is not a grammar issue but a word choice error; correcting it clarifies the meaning.

× It help me concentrate and keep my mind active.

✓ It helps me concentrate and keep my mind active.

The subject 'It' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'helps' to agree in number. Using 'help' without 's' is incorrect for third person singular subjects in the present tense.

× So emphasis is enjoyable and interesting.

✓ So it is enjoyable and interesting.

The word 'emphasis' is incorrect here; the intended pronoun is 'it' referring to doing puzzles. Using 'emphasis' is a misuse of pronouns and nouns, leading to confusion.

× And it gave and it gives me a sense of achievement.

✓ It gave and still gives me a sense of achievement.

The original sentence is awkward and repetitive. Adding 'still' clarifies the ongoing nature of the feeling. Also, starting a sentence with 'And' is informal; however, it is acceptable in spoken language.

× For example, during long trips or in evenings I would always throw puzzles to pass the time.

✓ For example, during long trips or in the evenings, I would always do puzzles to pass the time.

The phrase 'throw puzzles' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'do puzzles'. Also, 'in evenings' should be 'in the evenings' to use the definite article correctly. Adding a comma after 'evenings' improves readability.

× Greater.

✓ I find number puzzles more difficult than word puzzles.

The single word 'Greater' is an incomplete sentence and does not answer the question. A complete sentence comparing the difficulty of puzzles is needed to properly respond.

× Time. What do you feel?

✓ Yes, I think it is good for old people to do puzzles because it helps keep their minds active over time. What do you think?

The original response 'Time. What do you feel?' is incomplete and unclear. A full sentence expressing an opinion is necessary, and 'What do you feel?' is better phrased as 'What do you think?' for clarity and naturalness.