Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неестественные выражения, например, 'I was adore about it'. Следует использовать правильные времена и более естественные фразы. Также стоит избегать излишних слов и сделать ответ более связным.

例: Yes, I used to enjoy doing puzzles a lot when I was a child. My mother often helped me solve them, which made the experience even more enjoyable.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и слов-паразитов ('uh'), что снижает естественность речи. Рекомендуется практиковать более плавное и связное выражение мыслей, используя связующие слова для логичности.

例: I usually do puzzles during trips, especially when I'm with friends or family. I find it more interesting and challenging to solve puzzles together with others.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неясные выражения ('I'm deeply, I'm not deeply in this fear'). Следует использовать правильные конструкции и более чётко выражать мысли, избегая повторов и неуместных слов.

例: I definitely prefer word puzzles because number puzzles are much more difficult for me. This is mainly because I don't like math and find it challenging.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и повторов, что снижает плавность речи. Рекомендуется использовать более чёткие и связные предложения, избегая лишних слов и пауз.

例: I believe puzzles are a great way for elderly people to keep their brains active, which is very important for maintaining mental health.

× I remember that I was adore about it and my mom helped me to do it.

✓ I remember that I adored it and my mom helped me do it.

The phrase 'was adore about it' is incorrect. 'Adore' is a verb and should be used in the past tense 'adored' without 'was'. Also, 'helped me to do it' is better as 'helped me do it' because 'help' is often followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'.

× I think that it's more interesting and complicated, uh, to do it with, uh, another person.

✓ I think that it's more interesting and complicated to do it with another person.

The phrase 'with another person' is correct, but the sentence has unnecessary filler words 'uh' which should be removed for clarity. No pronoun error here, but the sentence can be improved by removing fillers.

× because the number puzzles much more difficult for me.

✓ because number puzzles are much more difficult for me.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' to link the subject 'number puzzles' and the adjective phrase 'much more difficult'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to plural subject requiring plural verb.

× I'm deeply, I'm not deeply in this fear.

✓ I'm not deeply into this fear.

The phrase 'not deeply in this fear' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'into' when expressing involvement or interest in something. Also, the repetition 'I'm deeply, I'm not deeply' is confusing and should be corrected to a clear statement.

× because it's, uh, is, uh, a train for the brain, which is, uh, essential for elderly people.

✓ because it's a training for the brain, which is essential for elderly people.

The word 'train' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'training'. Also, the sentence has unnecessary filler words 'uh' and an extra 'is' which should be removed for clarity.