Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples. Avoid vague phrases like "so many others."

例: Yes. I did a lot of puzzles as a child. For example, I often solved math puzzles and logic quizzes after school, which helped me enjoy problem-solving and improve my concentration.

提案: Use correct tense and link ideas more smoothly. Give one clear reason and one brief contrasting point using linking words like "however" or "but."

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored because they are a creative form of entertainment. However, when I travel I prefer to spend time with friends and take part in activities instead.

提案: Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Make a clear comparison using linking words like "while" or "whereas," and give a brief reason for the difficulty.

例: I prefer number puzzles because I find them straightforward and logical, whereas word puzzles are harder for me since they require a larger vocabulary and quick word associations.

提案: Repair grammatical mistakes and complete your ideas. State one main benefit and support it with a specific effect. Use linking words to connect sentences.

例: Yes, puzzles are very good for older people because they help keep the mind active and reduce feelings of isolation. For instance, joining a weekly puzzle group can improve social interaction and mental sharpness.

× I solved a lot of puzzle including maths along with quiz and so many others.

✓ I solved a lot of puzzles, including maths puzzles, quizzes, and many others.

The noun 'puzzle' and 'quiz' should be plural when preceded by 'a lot of' and referring to multiple items. Also 'maths' should be specified as 'maths puzzles' or 'math puzzles'. Use commas to separate items in a list. Suggestion: use plural forms when referring to multiple items and list items clearly.

× Actually, I solved puzzles when I feel bored and it's a source of creative and also entertainment.

✓ Actually, I solve puzzles when I feel bored; they're a source of creativity and entertainment.

Mixed tenses: 'solved' is past while 'I feel' is present. The question asks about current habit, so use present simple 'solve'. Use plural subject 'they' to agree with 'puzzles'. 'Creative' is an adjective; the noun 'creativity' fits here. Combine coordinated nouns with 'and'. Suggestion: keep consistent present-tense for habits and use correct noun forms.

× On the other side, when I go for a trip, I try to enjoy the moment with my friends and a lot of activities.

✓ On the other hand, when I go on a trip, I try to enjoy the moment with my friends and do a lot of activities.

Idiomatic expression is 'on the other hand' not 'on the other side'. Use preposition 'go on a trip' not 'go for a trip'. 'A lot of activities' should be paired with a verb 'do' to form a complete clause. Suggestion: use correct idioms and prepositions, and ensure each clause has a verb.

× Generally, I like solving number puzzles, which I find really straightforward, at least for me.

✓ Generally, I like solving number puzzles, which I find really straightforward.

Redundant phrase 'at least for me' is unnecessary because 'I find' already shows it is the speaker's opinion; not a strict grammar error but stylistic. Keep present simple 'like' and 'find'. Suggestion: remove redundant qualifiers for clarity.

× In contrast, I find it very tough to solve word puzzles, which is really complicated to me.

✓ In contrast, I find it very tough to solve word puzzles, which is really complicated for me.

Use preposition 'for' with 'complicated' to indicate who finds it complicated. Also 'which is' is awkward referring to 'word puzzles' plural; better 'which are' or restructure: 'which I find really complicated for me.' Suggestion: match verb number with noun and use 'complicated for'.

× That's how I find.

✓ That's how I feel.

Sentence 'That's how I find' is unidiomatic; the intended meaning is 'That's how I feel' or 'That's what I think.' Use a verb that matches the expression of opinion. Suggestion: use 'feel' or 'think' to express personal opinion.

× Of course, it is very beneficial for old people to solve puzzles.

✓ Of course, it is very beneficial for older people to solve puzzles.

Use 'older people' or 'old people' depends on formality; 'older people' is more appropriate and polite. This is an adjective choice issue. Suggestion: prefer 'older people' or 'elderly' in formal contexts.

× By solving puzzles, they can. Reduce their isolating feelings and also they can reduce that large.

✓ By solving puzzles, they can reduce their feelings of isolation, and they can also reduce loneliness.

Original has sentence fragment 'they can.' and unclear phrase 'reduce that large'. Reconstruct to a single coherent sentence: 'reduce their feelings of isolation' and 'reduce loneliness'. Ensure no sentence fragments and use clear nouns. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary periods, use clear expressions for emotional states.