Names— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and correct tense/word forms (e.g., "my name means happiness").

例: My name is Yasin, and in Mandarin it means "happiness." My parents chose it because they wanted me to value being happy rather than focusing on wealth or status.

提案: Open with a direct topic sentence. Use correct grammar for conditionals and possession ("my child's name"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and add a specific reason or example. Replace vague phrases with precise ones and use linking words like "because" and "also."

例: I would choose a name based on its meaning and originality because I want my child to feel unique. For example, my boyfriend suggested the name Kira for a future daughter, but I would research its meaning before deciding.

提案: Answer directly then give one clear supporting detail. Correct grammar (e.g., "everyone has" and "we share the same family name"). Remove fillers and redundancy. Use linking words like "so" or "because" to explain reasons concisely.

例: No, no one in my family has the same given name as me; we only share a family surname. We avoid repeating names because each person is considered special, and I have never met anyone else called Yasin.

提案: Provide a clear contrast with specific examples and complete the thought. Use linking phrases such as "in the past" and "now". Avoid hesitations and finish sentences with concrete details (e.g., modern trends).

例: Yes. In the past Chinese parents often chose traditional names that reflected national heroes or virtues, such as "Guoming." Nowadays, parents prefer more unique or internationally influenced names that sound modern and distinctive.

提案: Begin by directly acknowledging uncertainty, then provide a clear specific example from your experience. Correct grammar ("some of my friends are actually named Xiaoming") and remove repeated words. Use linking words like "however" or "for example."

例: I'm not sure about current trends in China, but in Malaysia a common Chinese name is Xiaoming. For example, that name even appears in school textbooks, and a few of my friends are actually called Xiaoming.

× Yes, my name is Yasin and it's means in Mandarin it's a Mandarin name and it means that happiness.

✓ Yes, my name is Yasin and it means in Mandarin that it is a Mandarin name and it means happiness.

The original uses "it's means" which wrongly combines the contraction 'it's' (it is) with the verb 'means'. After a subject 'it' use the base verb 'means' (third person singular). Also the clause structure was awkward; reordering removes redundant words. Suggestion: Use 'it means' for stating meanings and avoid combining 'it's' with another verb.

× So my parents gave me this name is because they want me to be always happy and happy as a priority in my life and instead of being umm like wealthy or stressful.

✓ So my parents gave me this name because they wanted me to always be happy and to put happiness first in my life instead of being, um, wealthy or stressed.

Problems: tense mismatch and awkward phrasing. 'gave' is past, so follow with past intention 'wanted'. Word order 'want me to be always happy' is unnatural; use 'always be happy'. 'Stressful' describes something that causes stress; the correct adjective for a person feeling stress is 'stressed'. Also remove extra 'is' after 'name'. Suggestion: Match tenses and use correct adjective forms ('stressed') and natural adverb placement ('always be').

× I haven't really thought about it but I think I would choose the name based on the meaning of the name and also I would like to choose the one that is not so common because I want my child name to be special.

✓ I haven't really thought about it, but I think I would choose a name based on its meaning, and I would like to choose one that is not so common because I want my child's name to be special.

Issues: 'the name' repeated and incorrect possessive 'my child name' instead of 'my child's name'. Use 'a name' and 'one' to avoid repetition. Also add comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use possessive forms for relationships and replace repetitive nouns with pronouns ('one', 'its').

× And I have talked to my boyfriend about this too and he want our future baby girl to name as Kira which I don't know what exactly is.

✓ And I have talked to my boyfriend about this too, and he wants our future baby girl to be named Kira, which I don't know the exact meaning of.

'He want' should be 'he wants' (third person singular requires -s). Also 'to name as Kira' is incorrect; use 'to be named Kira' or 'to name her Kira'. 'Which I don't know what exactly is' is ungrammatical; correct to 'which I don't know the exact meaning of.' Suggestion: Apply subject-verb agreement and use passive or infinitive forms correctly, and place 'meaning' at end of clause with 'of'.

× No, in my family everyone's have a different name.

✓ No, in my family everyone has a different name.

'Everyone's have' incorrectly combines the contraction 'everyone's' (everyone is/has) with 'have'. Use 'everyone has' for correct subject-verb agreement. Also 'everyone' is singular. Suggestion: Use 'everyone has' when indicating possession.

× So because we think everyone is a special and then we don't usually repeat the name like umm yeah and I think my name is quite precious too, where until now I don't even encounter someone that have the same name like me.

✓ We think everyone is special, so we don't usually repeat names. I also think my name is quite precious; until now I haven't encountered anyone who has the same name as me.

Errors: 'a special' should be 'special' (no article). 'Repeat the name' should be plural 'names' or 'repeat names'. Tense and agreement: 'I don't even encounter' should be past perfect or present perfect 'I haven't encountered'. 'Someone that have' should be 'anyone who has' (who for people, has for singular). 'Same name like me' -> 'same name as me'. Suggestion: Remove incorrect articles, use correct relative pronouns ('who'), and use present perfect for experiences up to now.

× I think yeah, there are differences between how the Chinese name their children before and now.

✓ I think, yes, there are differences between how the Chinese named their children before and how they name them now.

Mixing time references causes tense issues. Use past 'named' for 'before' and present 'name' for 'now' or rephrase with 'how they name them now'. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame in each clause.

× So before this, they often use some common names that uh, and also symbolise umm, like the great people of the country, like uh, Guo Ming, uh, and right now the parents often tend to.

✓ Before, they often used common names that symbolized great figures of the country, such as Guo Ming. Right now, parents often prefer different kinds of names.

Issues: incomplete sentence ('and right now the parents often tend to.'), incorrect tense 'use' should be 'used' for past, awkward phrasing 'symbolise like the great people'. Also fill in the trailing thought. Suggestion: Complete sentences, match tense and use clearer examples; avoid trailing conjunctions.

× I'm not sure about China, but in Malaysia most the most common Chinese name is the Xiaoming.

✓ I'm not sure about China, but in Malaysia the most common Chinese name is Xiaoming.

'Most the most common' is redundant. Article use: drop 'the' before 'Xiaoming' and avoid 'the' before proper name. Use 'the most common' then name without 'the'. Suggestion: Remove redundant words and articles before proper names.

× And some of my friends did actually named Xiaoming, so yeah.

✓ And some of my friends actually named their child Xiaoming.

'Did actually named' mixes auxiliary 'did' with past form 'named' incorrectly; use simple past 'named' without 'did', or 'did name' with base verb. Also add object 'their child' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct past tense construction: either 'named' or 'did name' + base verb; include the object of naming.