Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và thể hiện được ý kiến cá nhân, nhưng cần tránh lặp từ và câu dài không rõ ràng. Bạn nên chia câu thành các câu ngắn hơn, rõ ràng và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I love wearing jewelry and I usually wear it every day. I consider it an essential part of my outfit because it boosts my confidence significantly.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'jewelry' thay vì 'jury'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng từ nối để liên kết ý, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'it would depends'.

例: I prefer silver jewelry, but sometimes I choose pieces based on the color and style of my outfit to make sure they match well.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'I usually spend' thay vì 'spends', 'I often go' thay vì 'went'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên được tổ chức rõ ràng hơn với các câu ngắn và sử dụng từ nối để tăng tính mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I usually buy jewelry because I love it. I often go to stores to try them on since online shopping is difficult; I can't be sure about the material or how it will look on me.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu. Ví dụ, 'family gifts it' thay vì 'family gift it'. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: I believe people wear jewelry for a long time because they are emotionally attached to it. For example, it might be a gift from family or someone important, so they value it and wear it to remember those people.

× I think that it's just boost up my confidence in my outfits a lot.

✓ I think that it just boosts up my confidence in my outfits a lot.

The verb 'boost' needs to be in the third person singular present tense 'boosts' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue (ID 27).

× sometimes it would depends on my outfit whether the color or the style.

✓ sometimes it depends on my outfit whether the color or the style.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrectly used here. The correct form is simple present 'depends' to express habitual action. Modal verbs should not be combined with the third person singular form 'depends'. (ID 4)

× I would choose a jury that is matched to my outfit.

✓ I would choose jewelry that matches my outfit.

The word 'jury' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'jewelry' which is uncountable and singular. Also, 'is matched' should be 'matches' to agree with 'jewelry'. (ID 1)

× I usually spends a lot of money on jewelry.

✓ I usually spend a lot of money on jewelry.

The verb 'spends' should be 'spend' because the subject 'I' requires the base form of the verb in present tense. (ID 2)

× I often went to the store too but my jury because there I can try it on.

✓ I often went to the store too to buy my jewelry because there I can try it on.

The sentence is missing the verb 'buy' after 'but'. Also, 'jury' should be 'jewelry'. The past tense 'went' is correct here. (ID 5)

× Well, personally, I think that they're emotionally attached to that piece of jewelry.

✓ Well, personally, I think that they are emotionally attached to that piece of jewelry.

The contraction 'they're' is correct but can be expanded for clarity. No grammatical error here, so no correction needed. (No correction)

× Maybe their family gift it to them or some important persons in their life give it to them so they will say they valued it and they wear it so they can remember about them.

✓ Maybe their family gifted it to them or some important persons in their life gave it to them so they value it and wear it to remember them.

The verbs 'gift' and 'give' should be in past tense 'gifted' and 'gave' to match the past action. 'They will say they valued it' is awkward; 'they value it' is better. 'Remember about them' should be 'remember them'. (ID 5, 11)