Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，存在语法错误和断句问题，建议练习完整句子表达，避免断断续续。可以尝试用一句话直接回答，再补充细节。

例: Yes, I often wear jewelry. For example, my sister gave me a golden bracelet when I graduated from high school, and I have been wearing it ever since.

提案: 回答中断断续续，缺少连贯性和完整句子，建议使用连词连接句子，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Actually, I am an ordinary person, and I like golden jewelry the most because it is always shiny and looks beautiful to me.

提案: 回答表达重复且断句不完整，建议用完整句子表达原因，并避免重复。

例: No, I don't usually buy jewelry because it is quite expensive, and I don't have enough money to buy any.

提案: 回答较为简单且断句不连贯，建议使用连词连接观点，并详细说明原因，使表达更丰富。

例: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it becomes a part of their routine. Moreover, it matches their outfits and makes them feel more confident.

× Yes I do, my sister bought me a golden bracelet after. I graduated from high school. And from then on I always. Where? It.

✓ Yes, I do. My sister bought me a golden bracelet after I graduated from high school. And from then on, I always wear it.

句子中“after.”和“I graduated from high school.”断句不当，导致语义不连贯。应将“after I graduated from high school”作为时间状语从句连接，且“Where? It.”应为“wear it”，动词拼写错误。建议将句子合并并修正拼写。

× Actually, I am an ordinary person. I like. Golden Products. Most, and I think it. Is always shiny. And beautiful for me.

✓ Actually, I am an ordinary person. I like golden products most, and I think they are always shiny and beautiful to me.

句子中“Golden Products. Most,”断句错误，且“it”指代不明，应改为复数“they”，动词“is”应改为“are”以匹配复数主语。建议合并句子并调整代词和动词形式。

× No, I don't usually buy jewelry. Actually, I think I never buy jewelry ever because. It is a little bit expensive for me and I don't have. I don't have much money to buy some.

✓ No, I don't usually buy jewelry. Actually, I think I never buy jewelry because it is a little bit expensive for me and I don't have much money to buy any.

句子中“never buy jewelry ever”重复表达，且“buy some”用词不当，因否定句中应使用“any”。建议去除重复词汇并将“some”改为“any”。

× I think. It it is like a routine. They are used to wearing it and it can. Match their outfits. And make them more confident.

✓ I think it is like a routine. They are used to wearing it and it can match their outfits and make them more confident.

句子中“It it”重复，且断句不当导致语义不连贯。应去除重复词汇并合并句子，使表达更流畅。