Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a reason or feeling to support your answer.

例: Yes, I often wear jewelry because it makes me feel complete and confident. Whenever I don't wear any, I feel like something is missing.

提案: Your answer has some good ideas but is hard to understand due to grammar and word choice. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be specific about the types of jewelry and why you like them.

例: I like to wear simple jewelry such as finger rings, earrings, and necklaces because they make me look elegant. I usually choose pieces that match the clothes I wear.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to clearly state when and why you buy jewelry, and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid repeating the same ideas.

例: Yes, I usually buy jewelry when I find pieces that attract me. I like to match my jewelry with my clothes, especially during festivals.

提案: Your answer has a good idea but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence and explain your reason with linking words. Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: Some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it was a gift from their loved ones. They want to keep it close as a reminder of their special relationship.

× Is I do I wear jewelry and Elvis is I were to re everyday because it's give me feel complete.

✓ I do wear jewelry every day because it gives me a feeling of completeness.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues including incorrect word order and unnecessary words. The phrase 'Is I do I wear' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I do wear'. 'Elvis is I were to re' is nonsensical and removed. 'It's give me feel complete' should be 'it gives me a feeling of completeness' to use correct verb form and noun phrase.

× If whenever I'd only use any kind of jewelry.

✓ I only use certain kinds of jewelry.

The phrase 'If whenever' is incorrect and redundant. The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Simplifying to 'I only use certain kinds of jewelry' clarifies the meaning and corrects the conjunction misuse.

× This and there's make me feel incomplete.

✓ Otherwise, I feel incomplete without them.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'This and there's' is incorrect. Rewriting as 'Otherwise, I feel incomplete without them' provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence.

× So I wear injurious because make me feel.

✓ So I wear jewelry because it makes me feel complete.

'Injurious' is a misspelling of 'jewelry'. The sentence lacks a subject for 'make me feel'. Adding 'it' and completing the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× I like to work of finger rings and earrings and also on a necklace like a scene simple things which make me feel like elegant an also a bracelet with give me a elegant look.

✓ I like to wear finger rings, earrings, and also a necklace with simple designs that make me feel elegant, as well as a bracelet that gives me an elegant look.

'Work of' should be 'wear'. 'On a necklace like a scene simple things' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'a necklace with simple designs'. 'Like elegant' should be 'feel elegant'. 'With give me a elegant look' should be 'that gives me an elegant look'. Prepositions and article usage are corrected for clarity.

× So I wear what kind of dress I wear that.

✓ So I wear jewelry that matches the kind of dress I wear.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'jewelry that matches' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Is I do I buy jewelry whenever it's make me attracted to orbem.

✓ I buy jewelry whenever it attracts me.

'Is I do I buy' is incorrect; it should be 'I buy'. 'It's make me attracted to orbem' is incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'it attracts me'. The sentence is simplified for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I buy them because I am attractive jewelry which or who is messing with my dress.

✓ I buy them because they are attractive jewelry that matches my dress.

'I am attractive jewelry' is incorrect; the subject should be 'they' referring to jewelry. 'Which or who is messing with my dress' is incorrect; 'matches my dress' is the correct phrase. Pronoun and verb agreement are corrected.

× I buy them an whenever I'm going festival I'm matching jewelries with clothes on.

✓ I buy them, and whenever I'm going to a festival, I match jewelry with my clothes.

'An' should be 'and'. 'Going festival' should be 'going to a festival'. 'Matching jewelries with clothes on' should be 'match jewelry with my clothes'. Sentence structure and prepositions are corrected.

× Awesome people were a piece of jewelry for a long time becausde they gifted from their loved ones and close ones.

✓ Some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it was gifted by their loved ones and close ones.

'Awesome people' is likely a mishearing of 'some people'. 'Were' should be 'wear'. 'Becausde' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'They gifted from' should be 'it was gifted by'. Prepositions and verb forms are corrected.

× So they don't wanna take out from themselves they they want to wear them an.

✓ So they don't want to take it off; they want to keep wearing it.

'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is preferred. 'Take out from themselves' is incorrect; 'take it off' is correct. The sentence is split for clarity and corrected for grammar.