Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unnatural phrasing. Try to use correct plural forms and adverbs, and avoid redundancy. Also, structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. For example, say "I don't often wear jewelry because I prefer silver over gold. However, my mother likes to wear jewelry at parties."

例: I don't often wear jewelry because I prefer silver over gold. However, my mother likes to wear jewelry at parties, so sometimes I accompany her.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and explain your preference with specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, "I don't have a specific type of jewelry that I like. Instead, I choose jewelry that matches my outfit and looks good."

例: I don't have a specific type of jewelry that I like. Instead, I choose pieces that match my outfit and enhance my overall look.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains errors in plural forms and word choice. Use correct plural forms and more natural expressions. Also, add linking words to improve coherence. For example, "I don't usually buy jewelry on regular days; however, I do purchase some during festival occasions."

例: I don't usually buy jewelry on regular days; however, I do purchase some during festival occasions to celebrate.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to organize your ideas clearly with correct grammar and linking words. For example, "Some people wear jewelry for a long time because it reflects their social status or wealth. For instance, they may wear expensive pieces to showcase their success. Others use jewelry as a form of self-expression."

例: Some people wear jewelry for a long time because it reflects their social status or wealth. For instance, they may wear expensive pieces to showcase their success. Others use jewelry as a form of self-expression.

× I do not wear jewelries oftenly because I don't like to wear any kind of gold accessories on my body other than gold.

✓ I do not wear jewelry often because I don't like to wear any kind of gold accessories on my body other than gold.

The word 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Using 'jewelries' is incorrect. Also, 'oftenly' is not a correct adverb; the correct form is 'often'. Use 'jewelry' and 'often' to improve grammatical accuracy.

× I do not wear jewelries oftenly because I don't like to wear any kind of gold accessories on my body other than gold.

✓ I do not wear jewelry often because I don't like to wear any kind of gold accessories on my body other than gold.

'Oftenly' is not a correct adverb in English. The correct adverb form is 'often'. Replace 'oftenly' with 'often' for proper usage.

× But my mother like to wear jewelries on our party.

✓ But my mother likes to wear jewelry at our party.

'Jewelries' is incorrect because 'jewelry' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. Also, 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'my mother'. Additionally, 'on our party' should be 'at our party' (preposition correction).

× But my mother like to wear jewelries on our party.

✓ But my mother likes to wear jewelry at our party.

'My mother' is a third person singular subject, so the verb should be 'likes' instead of 'like' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× But my mother like to wear jewelries on our party.

✓ But my mother likes to wear jewelry at our party.

'On our party' is incorrect; the correct preposition to use with 'party' is 'at'. So, use 'at our party' for proper prepositional usage.

× I specially don't have any type 2 page entries.

✓ I don't especially have any particular type.

The phrase 'any type 2 page entries' is unclear and incorrect. Possibly, the student meant 'any particular type'. Also, 'specially' is misused; 'especially' is the correct adverb. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× I basically follow my dressing sense on what dressing sense the jewelry fits or good looks good.

✓ I basically choose jewelry based on what fits my dressing style or looks good.

The original sentence is confusing and has poor structure. 'Follow my dressing sense on what dressing sense the jewelry fits or good looks good' is unclear. The correction simplifies and clarifies the intended meaning.

× I felt those types of jewelries.

✓ I like those types of jewelry.

'Felt' is incorrect in this context; likely the student meant 'like'. Also, 'jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is uncountable. The sentence is corrected for proper verb and noun usage.

× I usually don't buy jewelries in regular days, but especially on the festival occasion I do buy jewelries.

✓ I usually don't buy jewelry on regular days, but especially on festival occasions I do buy jewelry.

'Jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is uncountable. Also, 'in regular days' should be 'on regular days', and 'festival occasion' should be plural 'festival occasions' for natural expression.

× I usually don't buy jewelries in regular days, but especially on the festival occasion I do buy jewelries.

✓ I usually don't buy jewelry on regular days, but especially on festival occasions I do buy jewelry.

'In regular days' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' for days. Also, 'on the festival occasion' is better as 'on festival occasions'.

× Some people will jewelries for a long term because it reflects the social status or wealth.

✓ Some people will wear jewelry for a long time because it reflects social status or wealth.

The verb 'will' needs a main verb; 'jewelries' is incorrect as a verb and noun. The correct verb is 'wear'. Also, 'for a long term' should be 'for a long time'. 'Jewelry' is uncountable.

× Some people will jewelries for a long term because it reflects the social status or wealth.

✓ Some people will wear jewelry for a long time because it reflects social status or wealth.

'Will' is a modal verb and should be followed by the base form of the verb, which is 'wear'. 'Jewelries' is not a verb. Also, 'for a long term' is incorrect; 'for a long time' is correct.

× Other wear their jewelry is has a form of self-expression or two.

✓ Others wear their jewelry as a form of self-expression too.

'Other' should be 'Others' to refer to people. 'Is has' is incorrect; it should be 'as'. 'Or two' is a mishearing of 'too'. The sentence is corrected for pronoun and verb usage and clarity.