Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够完整且句子未结束，缺乏连贯性。建议回答时保持句子完整，避免中断，并且可以简洁说明不常戴的原因。

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry. When I was younger, I used to buy gold necklaces and bracelets as birthday gifts, but now I avoid wearing jewelry, especially when I travel, to protect my belongings.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，且句子不完整。建议使用正确的语法，避免重复和犹豫词，清晰表达喜欢黄金饰品的原因。

例: I like gold jewelry the most because it gives me a strong sense of accomplishment and matches well with my clothes, making me feel confident.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，且缺少连贯的连接词。建议使用完整句子，注意主谓一致，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I don't usually buy jewelry for myself, but I enjoy purchasing gold jewelry for my daughter because it is a good collectible and stylish, and it matches well with different outfits.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不清，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议完整表达观点，提供具体原因和例子，并使用连接词。

例: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because these pieces often have sentimental value. For example, parents may pass down expensive jewelry to their children as family heirlooms.

× I used to buy some golden jewellery like necklace or bracelets for my birthday gifts when I was young.

✓ I used to buy some golden jewellery like necklaces or bracelets for my birthday gifts when I was young.

这里necklace是单数，而bracelets是复数，应该保持一致，necklace应改为复数形式necklaces。

× But now when it comes to traveling, I try to protect my belongings and.

✓ But now when it comes to traveling, I try to protect my belongings.

句子以and结尾，缺少后续内容，导致句子结构不完整，应去掉and使句子完整。

× I think I love the golden jewelries the most because it's not only gives me a strong sense of accomplishment, but also I can, umm, much much chase up my clothes.

✓ I think I love golden jewellery the most because it not only gives me a strong sense of accomplishment, but also helps me match my clothes better.

jewelries是不可数名词jewellery的错误复数形式，应改为jewellery。句中chase up my clothes用法不当，应改为match my clothes better。

× Uh, it can be go wrong and it has a strong ability of.

✓ Uh, it cannot go wrong and it has a strong durability.

can be go wrong结构错误，应改为cannot go wrong。句子后半部分不完整，补充合理内容使句子完整。

× Not really, but I love buying some gold jewellery for my daughter and I think Golden is not only provides a good sample of collection but also you can match with your clothes.

✓ Not really, but I love buying some gold jewellery for my daughter and I think gold not only provides a good example of a collection but also can be matched with your clothes.

Golden作为形容词使用不当，应改为名词gold。sample of collection表达不准确，应改为example of a collection。match后不需要with。

× Very stylish and I'd like.

✓ It is very stylish and I like it.

句子缺少主语和谓语，导致结构不完整，应补充完整句子。

× Maybe some parents pass these expensive jewelries to their relatives and.

✓ Maybe some parents pass these expensive jewellery pieces to their relatives.

jewelries错误复数形式，应改为jewellery pieces。句子以and结尾不完整，应去掉and。