Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "my earrings" and correct tense usage, for example, "I feel" instead of "I felt". Also, keep your answer concise and natural by limiting it to 3-4 sentences.

例: Yes, I often wear jewelry, especially rings and earrings. I like earrings because they make me look more graceful and cute.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors such as singular/plural mismatch and unfinished sentences. Make sure to complete your thoughts and use correct plural forms like "rings" and "jewelry" (uncountable). Also, use linking words properly to connect ideas.

例: I prefer to wear rings and earrings most of the time because they are simple and elegant. Occasionally, I also wear necklaces to complement my outfit.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Avoid repeating words like "I" and "which". Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific reasons or examples.

例: I consider jewelry a luxury, so I don't buy it often. However, I own some rings, earrings, and necklaces that I wear occasionally for special events.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding more specific details and using more precise vocabulary. For example, explain what kind of "touch" jewelry adds and how it boosts confidence. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it enhances their overall appearance by adding elegance. Moreover, wearing jewelry can boost their confidence and make them feel more attractive.

× I like to wear my earrings because I felt like I look more graceful and cute when I'm on my earrings.

✓ I like to wear my earrings because I feel like I look more graceful and cute when I wear my earrings.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'felt' and mixes it with present tense 'look'. Since the context is habitual action, present tense 'feel' and 'look' should be used. Also, 'when I'm on my earrings' is incorrect; it should be 'when I wear my earrings' to indicate wearing jewelry.

× I prefer to wear ring and earrings most of the time.

✓ I prefer to wear rings and earrings most of the time.

The word 'ring' should be plural 'rings' to match 'earrings' and to indicate more than one piece of jewelry. Using singular 'ring' with plural 'earrings' is inconsistent.

× Those two are the jewelries that I wear on a daily basis.

✓ Those two are the pieces of jewelry that I wear on a daily basis.

The word 'jewelries' is incorrect because 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. The correct phrase is 'pieces of jewelry' to indicate countable items.

× Furthermore, occasionally I wear necklace and.

✓ Furthermore, occasionally I wear a necklace.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'and.' Also, 'necklace' should be preceded by the article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. The corrected sentence completes the thought properly.

× For me jewelry is a luxury and I don't want to waste money on some things that are unnecessary.

✓ For me, jewelry is a luxury and I don't want to waste money on things that are unnecessary.

The phrase 'some things' is acceptable but 'things' alone is more natural here. Also, a comma after 'For me' improves clarity. This is a minor stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar error.

× But I I have some jewelry with me like the rings, earrings and necklace which which I use occasionally when there is an event.

✓ But I have some jewelry with me like rings, earrings, and a necklace which I use occasionally when there is an event.

The phrase 'the rings' and 'necklace' need consistency. 'Rings' and 'earrings' are plural and do not need 'the' here. 'Necklace' is singular and requires the article 'a'. Also, repeated words 'I I' and 'which which' are errors and should be corrected.

× I believe some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it adds touch to their overall appearance.

✓ I believe some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it adds a touch to their overall appearance.

The phrase 'adds touch' is missing the article 'a' before 'touch'. The correct phrase is 'adds a touch' to indicate it contributes something to their appearance.