Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构不完整，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致和时态，避免冗余。

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because I have two kids and a lot of housework to do. Also, I work on the computer a lot, so wearing jewelry is not convenient.

提案: 表达较为简单，部分用词不准确，如'harmony'用法不当。建议使用更自然的表达，并丰富细节。

例: I like pearl jewelry because of its round shape and white color. It looks elegant and peaceful. I have a pearl necklace, but I don't wear it very often.

提案: 句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意比较结构和词汇搭配。

例: No, I don't usually buy jewelry. I prefer to save money in the bank because it feels safer and can earn some interest.

提案: 回答较简短，语法有误，如'appearance looks better'。建议使用更完整的句子并提供更多细节。

例: I think it's a personal choice, and I respect that. Some people wear jewelry for a long time because it helps them look better and feel more confident.

× I'm afraid not because I have two kids and there are a lot of housework I need to do.

✓ I'm afraid not because I have two kids and there is a lot of housework I need to do.

“housework”是不可数名词，不能用复数形式“a lot of housework”，应使用单数形式“there is a lot of housework”。

× Meanwhile during daily work I need to type a large on computer.

✓ Meanwhile during daily work I need to type a lot on the computer.

“a large”用法错误，应使用“a lot”表示大量；同时“on computer”缺少冠词，应为“on the computer”。

× It looks so like a harmony and I have a necklace of Pearl, though I don't wear it a lot.

✓ It looks so harmonious and I have a pearl necklace, though I don't wear it a lot.

“looks so like a harmony”表达不正确，应使用形容词“harmonious”修饰“looks”；“a necklace of Pearl”应改为“a pearl necklace”，形容词放在名词前。

× I'm afraid not comparing to jewelry.

✓ I'm afraid not compared to jewelry.

“comparing to”用法错误，正确表达应为“compared to”，表示比较。

× I prefer to deposit money directly in bank because it makes me feel safe and also it can increase some interest.

✓ I prefer to deposit money directly in the bank because it makes me feel safe and also it can earn some interest.

“in bank”缺少冠词，应为“in the bank”；“increase some interest”表达不准确，存款“earn interest”更合适。

× I think it may be because they want their personal appearance looks better.

✓ I think it may be because they want their personal appearance to look better.

“appearance looks better”中“appearance”后应接不定式“to look”，而非动词第三人称单数形式“looks”。