Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意冠词使用。

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because my school rules prohibit it. Also, I haven't had enough money to buy any since primary school.

提案: 回答中词汇使用错误（如“knickers”应为“necklaces”），表达不清晰且有语法错误。建议使用正确词汇，简洁表达观点，并避免无关细节。

例: I like necklaces because they complement my clothes and make me feel more confident, especially when I have to speak in public.

提案: 回答中存在词汇错误（“jury”应为“jewelry”），重复词语和语法问题。建议注意词汇准确性，避免重复，并简洁表达理由。

例: No, I usually don't buy jewelry because I lack knowledge about it and I also don't have enough money.

提案: 回答语法混乱，表达不清晰，词汇错误（“jury”应为“jewelry”）。建议理清句子结构，使用正确词汇，并清楚表达观点。

例: Some people wear jewelry for a long time because it becomes like a friend that supports and accompanies them.

× So I did not wear jewelry since primary school and another another reason is I do not have enough money to buy a jewelry.

✓ So I have not worn jewelry since primary school and another reason is I do not have enough money to buy jewelry.

这里使用了过去时态'did not wear'，但表示从过去持续到现在的动作，应使用现在完成时'have not worn'。另外，'a jewelry'中'jewelry'是不可数名词，不需要冠词'a'。

× I do not have enough money to buy a jewelry.

✓ I do not have enough money to buy jewelry.

'Jewelry'是不可数名词，前面不应加不定冠词'a'。

× Knickers because a necklace can match your clothes and make your neck neck look more beautiful.

✓ Necklaces because a necklace can match your clothes and make your neck look more beautiful.

'Knickers'是内裤的意思，显然与珠宝无关，应改为'necklaces'。另外，'neck neck'重复，应去掉一个。

× When I feel nervous on the stage or when sometimes I will do a presentation, I kiss the earring.

✓ When I feel nervous on the stage or when I have to do a presentation, I kiss my earring.

'When sometimes I will do'结构不正确，应改为'when I have to do'。'the earring'应改为'my earring'，表示特指自己的耳环。

× No, because I don't have enough knowledge about the jury, so I can't guarantee the jewelry I bought is is fit for me.

✓ No, because I don't have enough knowledge about jewelry, so I can't guarantee the jewelry I bought fits me.

'Jury'是陪审团的意思，应改为'jewelry'。'is is fit for me'重复且结构不正确，应改为'fits me'。

× And the second reason is that I don't have enough money.

✓ And the second reason is that I don't have enough money.

该句无语法错误，无需修改。

× For some people, the jury they were a long time may become became of may have become a friend of them because it accompanies them and always it gives them support.

✓ For some people, the jewelry they have worn for a long time may have become like a friend to them because it accompanies them and always gives them support.

'Jury'应为'jewelry'。'they were a long time'结构错误，应为'they have worn for a long time'。'may become became of may have become'表达混乱，应为'may have become'。'a friend of them'应为'like a friend to them'。此外，句子结构需调整使其通顺。