Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but it lacks clarity and natural English usage. Try to avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use simple and clear sentences to express your dislike for jewelry and explain why.

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because it irritates my skin and makes me uncomfortable.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer silver jewelry because it suits my skin tone. For example, I usually wear simple silver earrings or bracelets every day.

提案: Your answer has repetition and unclear phrases. Avoid repeating words and use correct expressions. Also, clarify your ideas with proper linking words and correct time expressions.

例: No, I don't usually buy jewelry because I'm not very interested in it. However, I sometimes buy jewelry for special occasions, like I bought some for my cousin's birthday last week.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct sentence structures and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I think people who love jewelry wear it for a long time because it complements their skin and makes them look stylish. For example, my mother always wears earrings and bracelets.

× They make me poking my skin every time I wear anything they are feel they feel so irritated by me.

✓ They make my skin poke every time I wear anything; they feel so irritated by me.

The phrase 'make me poking' is incorrect because after 'make' we use the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs to be split for clarity.

× They make me poking my skin every time I wear anything they are feel they feel so irritated by me.

✓ They make my skin poke every time I wear anything; they feel so irritated by me.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'my skin' as the object experiencing the irritation.

× I think I like the silver Jerry mode because it suits my skin and I don't like golden jewellery because it made me so dull and gloomy.

✓ I think I like the silver jewelry because it suits my skin, and I don't like golden jewelry because it makes me look dull and gloomy.

The word 'made' should be 'makes' to agree with the present tense, and 'so dull and gloomy' needs 'look' to describe appearance properly.

× For example, I wear simple earrings or bracelet of silver color for everyday use.

✓ For example, I wear simple earrings or a bracelet of silver color for everyday use.

The singular noun 'bracelet' needs an article 'a' to be grammatically correct when used with 'or'.

× No, I don't usually buy jewelry because I'm not a jewelry freak, but I sometimes sometimes oil jewelry whenever there is a vacation, there is a vacation or I need to go somewhere special.

✓ No, I don't usually buy jewelry because I'm not a jewelry freak, but I sometimes wear jewelry whenever there is a vacation or I need to go somewhere special.

The word 'oil' is incorrect here; it should be 'wear' to indicate using jewelry. Also, 'sometimes' is repeated unnecessarily.

× For example, I bought a jewelry for my cousin's birthday next previous week.

✓ For example, I bought jewelry for my cousin's birthday last week.

The phrase 'next previous week' is incorrect; 'last week' is the proper expression. Also, 'a jewelry' is incorrect because 'jewelry' is uncountable.

× I think people who love to wear jewelry, oil, jewellery for a long time because they the jewelry complements their skin and they look more stylish with the jewelleries.

✓ I think people who love to wear jewelry for a long time do so because the jewelry complements their skin and they look more stylish with the jewelry.

'Jewelleries' is incorrect as 'jewelry' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. Also, 'oil' is incorrect and should be removed or replaced with 'wear'.

× For example, my mother always wears earrings and bracelet and everything.

✓ For example, my mother always wears earrings, a bracelet, and everything else.

The singular noun 'bracelet' needs an article 'a' and 'everything' should be 'everything else' for clarity.