Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly unnatural, especially the phrase "it increases my beauty for 10 weeks" which is confusing. Try to keep your answers concise and natural, avoiding unclear expressions.

例: Yes, I often wear jewelry, especially earrings, because they suit me and boost my confidence.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases like "someone will see fit." Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I like different types of jewelry, but my favorite is earrings because they are comfortable and I don't worry about losing them.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammar errors and repetition, such as "by by other people." Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: No, I usually receive jewelry as birthday presents from my relatives, especially my sister, so I don't often buy them myself.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrasing. Try to organize your ideas clearly using linking words and avoid repeating words. Also, be specific and concise.

例: People may wear jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value, like a gift from a close family member. For example, I treasure a piece my sister gave me.

× Well, I love various types of jewelries and my favorite one is earrings because it's really comfortable for me and I won't be worried that they will get lost or someone will see fit.

✓ Well, I love various types of jewelry and my favorite one is earrings because they're really comfortable for me and I won't be worried that they will get lost or someone will see them.

The word 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form, so 'jewelries' is incorrect. Also, 'earrings' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they're' instead of 'it's'. Additionally, 'someone will see fit' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'someone will see them' to refer to the earrings.

× No, I usually get jewelry as a present from my relatives to my birthday and also my sister bought me lots of jewelry so I don't spend lots of money on jewelries I just get them by by other people.

✓ No, I usually get jewelry as a present from my relatives for my birthday and also my sister bought me lots of jewelry so I don't spend lots of money on jewelry; I just get them from other people.

Again, 'jewelry' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'jewelries'. Also, the preposition 'to' is incorrect here; it should be 'for my birthday'. The phrase 'get them by by other people' is incorrect; it should be 'get them from other people'.

× No, I usually get jewelry as a present from my relatives to my birthday and also my sister bought me lots of jewelry so I don't spend lots of money on jewelries I just get them by by other people.

✓ No, I usually get jewelry as a present from my relatives for my birthday and also my sister bought me lots of jewelry so I don't spend lots of money on jewelry; I just get them from other people.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect when referring to receiving gifts for an occasion; the correct preposition is 'for'. Also, 'by by' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'from' to indicate the source of the jewelry.

× I think there can be several reasons of this. For example, it may be an important gift from their close family, from their mother or some other relatives In in my in my case, it's important for me because as gift for my sister.

✓ I think there can be several reasons for this. For example, it may be an important gift from their close family, from their mother or some other relatives. In my case, it's important for me because it is a gift from my sister.

The phrase 'reasons of this' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'reasons for this'. Also, the sentence lacks punctuation and has repeated words 'In in my in my'. The phrase 'because as gift for my sister' is incorrect; it should be 'because it is a gift from my sister'.