Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure, and avoid unclear phrases like "light waiter" and "small start." Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I often wear jewelry. Usually, I wear a small gold ring and a silver bracelet every day.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains unclear phrases like "specially pulled" and "stone Jelly." Try to organize your ideas clearly and use appropriate vocabulary related to jewelry types. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

例: I like gold jewelry and pieces made with stones, especially pearls. Whenever I buy jewelry, I prefer pearl and stone designs because they look beautiful.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I seldom buy jewelry because I prefer gold, which is quite expensive. Usually, I only buy jewelry for special occasions like my wedding or anniversary.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons. Also, clarify unclear phrases like "Locket edge."

例: It depends on the person and their culture. In some countries, people wear jewelry for a long time because it looks elegant. For example, in India, many women wear lockets as a traditional accessory.

× Yes, I usually wear the jewelry light waiter especially a small start and some gold.

✓ Yes, I usually wear light jewellery, especially a small star and some gold.

The phrase 'light waiter' is incorrect and likely a misordering or mishearing of 'light jewellery'. Also, 'small start' should be 'small star'. The order of adjectives and nouns must be corrected for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I usually wear the jewelry light waiter especially a small start and some gold.

✓ Yes, I usually wear light jewellery, especially a small star and some gold.

The word 'jewelry' is uncountable and should not be preceded by 'the' in this context. Also, 'some gold' is correct as gold is uncountable.

× 1 gold ring, 1 silver and daily basis I wear the my silver bracelet.

✓ One gold ring, one silver ring, and on a daily basis, I wear my silver bracelet.

The phrase '1 gold ring, 1 silver' is incomplete; 'silver' should be 'silver ring' to be parallel. Also, 'the my' is incorrect; only 'my' is needed. 'On a daily basis' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× 1 gold ring, 1 silver and daily basis I wear the my silver bracelet.

✓ One gold ring, one silver ring, and on a daily basis, I wear my silver bracelet.

The phrase 'daily basis' requires the preposition 'on' to form 'on a daily basis'.

× I like gold jewellery and some made of some stones and specially pulled and it looks so pretty and whenever I go to buy the jewelry that time I like to buy Pearl and stone Jelly.

✓ I like gold jewellery, some made of stones, especially pearls, and it looks so pretty. Whenever I go to buy jewellery, I like to buy pearl and stone jewellery.

The sentence has pronoun and noun agreement issues. 'Some made of some stones' is unclear; 'some made of stones' is better. 'Specially pulled' is incorrect; likely meant 'especially pearls'. 'That time' is unnecessary and awkward. 'Pearl and stone Jelly' should be 'pearl and stone jewellery'.

× I like gold jewellery and some made of some stones and specially pulled and it looks so pretty and whenever I go to buy the jewelry that time I like to buy Pearl and stone Jelly.

✓ I like gold jewellery, some made of stones, especially pearls, and it looks so pretty. Whenever I go to buy jewellery, I like to buy pearl and stone jewellery.

The use of 'some' twice is redundant and confusing. 'Some made of some stones' should be 'some made of stones'. Also, 'Pearl' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun.

× However, it is the too expensive I can't afford.

✓ However, it is too expensive; I can't afford it.

The phrase 'it is the too expensive' is incorrect. 'The' is unnecessary before 'too expensive'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs proper punctuation.

× Many times I buy it only on special as in my wedding, wedding anniversary gift.

✓ Many times, I buy it only on special occasions, such as my wedding or wedding anniversary gifts.

The phrase 'on special' is incomplete; it should be 'on special occasions'. Also, 'wedding anniversary gift' should be pluralized to 'wedding anniversary gifts' or rephrased for clarity.

× It depend on the person and the cultures.

✓ It depends on the person and the culture.

The verb 'depend' should be 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, 'cultures' is plural but 'the person' is singular; better to use 'culture' singular to match or rephrase.

× It depend on the person and the cultures.

✓ It depends on the person and the culture.

The verb 'depend' must be conjugated as 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'It'.

× because it's looks good and give the elegant look.

✓ because it looks good and gives an elegant look.

'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' and should not be followed by 'looks'. Also, 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'The elegant look' should be 'an elegant look'.

× And the other side some people especially in my country India women wear the Locket edge.

✓ On the other hand, some people, especially women in my country India, wear the locket edge.

'And the other side' is incorrect; 'On the other hand' is the correct phrase. The sentence structure is awkward; commas are needed to clarify meaning. 'Locket edge' may be a specific term but should be lowercase unless a proper noun.