Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınızda daha təbii ifadələrdən istifadə edin və cümlələrinizi daha aydın və məntiqli qurun. Məsələn, "It's almost on my ears" ifadəsi qarışıqdır və düzgün deyil. Həmçinin, "it gives me different apparently" ifadəsi mənasızdır və düzgün ifadə edilməlidir.

例: Yes, I often wear jewelry, especially earrings, which I wear almost every day. I also like to wear bracelets because they add variety to my style.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha düzgün və aydın qurun. Məsələn, "My favorite jeweler type is the one who was made from silver" ifadəsi qrammatik olaraq səhvlidir. Daha spesifik və əlaqəli sözlərdən istifadə edin.

例: I prefer jewelry made of silver, and I also like pieces with diamonds and white stones because they match my style well.

提案: Danışığınızda çoxlu "umm" kimi sözlərdən qaçının və cümlələrinizi daha aydın və məntiqli edin. "Another thing I buy drinks often because they get bad" cümləsi mövzu ilə əlaqəsiz və qarışıqdır. Daha konkret və mövzuya uyğun cavab verin.

例: Yes, I often buy jewelry, especially earrings, because I wear them daily and like to change styles frequently.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha düzgün və aydın ifadə edin. Məsələn, "that piece of jewelry is their shows their personality" ifadəsi qarışıqdır. Daha spesifik və məntiqli səbəblər verin.

例: I believe some people wear certain jewelry for a long time because it reflects their personality and holds sentimental value, reminding them of special memories.

× It's almost on my ears.

✓ They're almost always on my ears.

The phrase 'on my ears' is awkward and incorrect in this context. Earrings are worn on the ears, but the sentence intends to express frequency or habit. Using 'They're almost always on my ears' correctly indicates that the student frequently wears earrings.

× because it gives me different apparently.

✓ because it gives me a different appearance.

The word 'apparently' is an adverb meaning 'seemingly' and is incorrectly used here. The correct noun is 'appearance' to express how the bracelets affect the student's look.

× My favorite jeweler type is the one who was made from silver and I also like a diamond and white stones.

✓ My favorite type of jewelry is the one made from silver, and I also like diamonds and white stones.

'Jeweler type' is incorrect; it should be 'type of jewelry.' 'Who was made' is incorrect because jewelry is not a person; 'made' suffices. 'A diamond and white stones' should be plural 'diamonds and white stones' to match the context.

× I don't know, I think it's that fits my style, that's why I wear them.

✓ I don't know, I think that's what fits my style; that's why I wear them.

The phrase 'it's that fits' is incorrect. The correct relative pronoun is 'that's what' to refer to the jewelry fitting the style. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× Umm yes, umm I often buy jewelry umm especially my earrings because they umm I because I wear them every day I get bored quickly.

✓ Umm yes, I often buy jewelry, especially earrings, because I wear them every day and get bored quickly.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive with filler words. Removing unnecessary fillers and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Another thing I buy drinks often because they get bad.

✓ Another thing I often buy is rings because they get damaged.

'Drinks' is incorrect in this context; likely the student meant 'rings.' Also, 'they get bad' is vague; 'they get damaged' is more appropriate for jewelry. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× I think the reason for that is people think that piece of jewelry is their shows their personality and it reminds people of her.

✓ I think the reason for that is people think that piece of jewelry shows their personality and reminds them of someone.

The phrase 'is their shows their personality' is incorrect and redundant. 'Shows their personality' suffices. 'It reminds people of her' is unclear; 'reminds them of someone' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I think it's very beautiful to have your own necklace or bracelet that you were often.

✓ I think it's very beautiful to have your own necklace or bracelet that you wear often.

The word 'were' is the past tense of 'wear' and is incorrect here. The present tense 'wear' is needed to indicate habitual action.