Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a more complete answer by explaining your feelings or habits in more detail and avoid simple yes/no answers. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because I find it quite expensive, and I prefer to spend my money on other things that I need more.

提案: Provide a full sentence as a topic sentence and add supporting details using linking words to explain why you like that type of jewelry.

例: I like diamond jewelry because it looks very luxurious and elegant, which makes people feel special when they wear it.

提案: Answer directly and add more specific details about your own experience or feelings. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly.

例: I usually don't buy jewelry myself, but my mom does because she enjoys collecting different pieces; for example, she buys new jewelry on the first day of every month.

提案: Avoid saying 'I don't know' and try to give a clear opinion with reasons and examples. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value, and also it helps them look attractive and confident in social situations.

× She always buys jewelry at the first day of every month.

✓ She always buys jewelry on the first day of every month.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used with 'the first day'. The correct preposition to indicate a specific day is 'on'. Therefore, 'at the first day' should be corrected to 'on the first day'. This improves the sentence's grammatical accuracy and naturalness.