Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains some unclear or awkward phrases, such as "some band aids which compliment my every outfit." To improve, be more precise and avoid confusing expressions. Also, try to keep your answer concise and directly related to the question, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't often wear jewelry, but I usually wear a gold chain that my mom gave me when I was a child. It has become a habit, and I feel it complements my style well.

提案: Your answer has good content but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors and informal fillers like "you know." To improve, use clear and grammatically correct sentences, avoid fillers, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I prefer silver jewelry because it suits my skin tone and complements my overall look. Additionally, silver pieces are simple yet elegant, which makes me feel classy.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but the phrase "the color of full jewelry" is confusing. To improve, clarify your points and avoid ambiguous expressions. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: I usually buy silver jewelry because it matches my skin tone and style. For instance, I often wear a silver necklace daily, as it reflects my elegant personality.

提案: Your answer is thoughtful and relevant, but it could be improved by using more precise linking words and avoiding repetitive phrases like "kind of habit." Also, try to make your sentences more concise and grammatically correct.

例: I believe people wear jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value. For example, I wear a necklace gifted by my best friend every day to cherish our friendship, and it has become a meaningful habit.

× So I now normally wear something around my neck like some band aids which compliment my every outfit.

✓ So I now normally wear something around my neck like some band-aids which complement my every outfit.

The word 'band aids' should be hyphenated as 'band-aids' to correctly represent the plural form of the brand name. Also, 'compliment' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'complement' which means to enhance or go well with something. The verb 'complement' should be in plural form 'complement' to agree with the plural subject 'band-aids'.

× So that's the silver just complements my overall look and it's more simple and not, you know, it makes you feel look like elegant and classy.

✓ So the silver just complements my overall look and it's simpler and, you know, it makes you feel elegant and classy.

The phrase 'more simple' is incorrect; the correct comparative form is 'simpler'. Also, 'makes you feel look like elegant and classy' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'makes you feel elegant and classy' to properly express the intended meaning.

× I prefer silver jewellery because it complements my skin tone and overall style very well. Silver pieces tend to be more elegant, which suits my personality better than the color of full jewelry.

✓ I prefer silver jewellery because it complements my skin tone and overall style very well. Silver pieces tend to be more elegant, which suits my personality better than the colour of full jewelry.

The phrase 'color of full jewelry' is unclear and likely incorrect. Possibly, the intended phrase is 'colour of gold jewelry' or 'colour of costume jewelry'. Also, 'color' should be spelled 'colour' in Canadian English. The sentence needs clarification to correctly compare silver jewelry with another type.

× For instance, the necklace I'm wearing right now is gift from my best friend and I wear it every day to cherish our friendship and it became kind of habit for me to wear it and I feel incomplete without it.

✓ For instance, the necklace I'm wearing right now is a gift from my best friend and I wear it every day to cherish our friendship. It has become a kind of habit for me to wear it and I feel incomplete without it.

The phrase 'is gift from' is missing the article 'a'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and should be split for clarity. 'It became kind of habit' should be 'It has become a kind of habit' to correctly use the present perfect tense indicating an ongoing habit.