Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with vocabulary accuracy; 'slippers' are not jewelry. Also, keep your answer concise and directly relevant. Try to use correct terms and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I often wear jewelry like earrings and necklaces when I go out because they complement my outfit nicely.

提案: Ensure clarity and correct word choice; 'poo poo' is unclear and likely a mistake. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons.

例: I like pearl earrings because they look elegant and add a nice touch to my outfit.

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases like 'the kitchen is wearing juice.' Keep your answer coherent and directly related to the question.

例: I don't often buy jewelry because I work in the kitchen, and it's not practical to wear jewelry there.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use linking words for coherence. Be more specific and clear about the reasons why people keep jewelry for a long time.

例: I think people wear certain pieces of jewelry for a long time because they hold special meaning, such as a wedding ring that reminds them of important memories.

× I like earring with some pearls.

✓ I like earrings with some pearls.

The word 'earring' should be plural 'earrings' because it refers to more than one item. When talking about jewelry pieces like earrings, the plural form is appropriate to indicate multiple items.

× I think poo poo is a very elegant jewellery.

✓ I think pearls are very elegant jewellery.

The phrase 'poo poo' is incorrect and unclear; it seems the student meant 'pearls'. Also, 'jewellery' is uncountable, so 'a very elegant jewellery' is incorrect; it should be 'very elegant jewellery' without 'a'.

× To make your outfit a nice touch.

✓ They add a nice touch to your outfit.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks a subject and verb. It should be a complete sentence explaining how the jewelry affects the outfit.

× I not often to buy jewelry.

✓ I do not often buy jewelry.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'do' for negation and the infinitive 'to' is incorrectly used. The correct form is 'I do not often buy jewelry.'

× Because I work at the kitchen right now.

✓ Because I am working in the kitchen right now.

The sentence is a fragment and uses incorrect preposition 'at' with 'kitchen'. It should be a complete sentence with the present continuous tense and the preposition 'in'.

× Uh, the kitchen is wearing juice.

✓ Uh, the kitchen is very busy.

The phrase 'the kitchen is wearing juice' is nonsensical. Likely, the student meant to say the kitchen is busy or active. 'Wearing juice' is incorrect and should be replaced with an appropriate adjective.

× I guess they're a piece of jewelry, have some special meaning to them.

✓ I guess a piece of jewelry has some special meaning to them.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'they're' (they are) with singular 'a piece of jewelry'. The subject and verb must agree in number; 'a piece' is singular, so the verb should be 'has'.

× Like a, the wedding ring is given the meaning of recall the memory.

✓ For example, a wedding ring symbolizes recalling memories.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. It should be rephrased to clearly express that a wedding ring symbolizes or represents memories.