Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，且未直接回答问题。建议直接回答是否经常佩戴首饰，并简要说明原因，避免重复和语法错误。

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because I am a student and cannot afford to buy any.

提案: 回答中表达不够连贯，且信息不明确。建议直接说明喜欢的首饰类型，并用连词连接理由，表达更自然。

例: I like luxury jewelry, especially Cartier, because it is beautiful and has excellent quality.

提案: 回答内容有些混乱，语法和表达不准确。建议简洁明了地说明购买首饰的频率和原因，使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: I usually buy jewelry when I feel nervous because shopping helps me relax and forget my worries.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，建议使用更准确的表达，并用连词连接观点，使回答更连贯。

例: I think people wear jewelry for a long time because they really like the style they chose, and also because some pieces have high sentimental or monetary value.

× At first I had I don't have any Julia because I am student.

✓ At first I didn't have any jewelry because I am a student.

这里“Julia”应为“jewelry”，且“jewelry”是不可数名词，不用复数形式。句中缺少冠词“a”修饰“student”。

× I am student.

✓ I am a student.

“student”是可数名词，单数形式前需要冠词“a”。

× I don't have enough money to buy the Julia.

✓ I don't have enough money to buy jewelry.

“jewelry”是不可数名词，不用加冠词“the”或复数形式。

× I prefer to choose a Cartier and freedom to buy the jewelry and the type of jewelry is is wonderful.

✓ I prefer to choose Cartier and feel free to buy jewelry, and the type of jewelry is wonderful.

句中“freedom”用错，应为“feel free”。“a Cartier”应去掉冠词，因为“Cartier”是品牌名。重复的“is is”应改为单个“is”。

× the type of jewelry is is wonderful.

✓ The type of jewelry is wonderful.

去掉重复的“is”。

× Uh, I buy Julie when I feel nervous because every time I go for shopping and which can make me feel relaxed and I really enjoy shopping.

✓ Uh, I buy jewelry when I feel nervous because every time I go shopping it makes me feel relaxed and I really enjoy shopping.

“Julie”应为“jewelry”。“go for shopping”应改为“go shopping”。“and which can make me feel relaxed”结构不正确，应改为“it makes me feel relaxed”。

× So every time I I'm shopping, I always forget something bad.

✓ So every time I'm shopping, I always forget something bad.

“I I'm”重复，应去掉多余的“I”。

× people really like the type of jewelry were chose by them.

✓ people really like the type of jewelry chosen by them.

“were chose”应为过去分词“chosen”，表示被动语态。

× people really like the type of jewelry were chose by them.

✓ people really like the type of jewelry chosen by them.

被动语态中应使用过去分词“chosen”，而不是过去式“chose”。

× the Julie volume value is really high, so they will keep a Julia for a long time.

✓ the jewelry value is really high, so they will keep a piece of jewelry for a long time.

“Julie”应为“jewelry”。“volume value”表达不准确，应为“value”。“a Julia”应改为“a piece of jewelry”，因为“jewelry”是不可数名词。