Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid repeating words like "I whenever" and use more natural phrasing. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid unnecessary words.

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because I have sensitive skin that gets irritated easily. For instance, my skin becomes itchy whenever I wear rings or bracelets, so I prefer to avoid them to stay comfortable.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains several grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Avoid filler words like "uh" and use correct vocabulary (e.g., "bracelets" instead of "brackets"). Also, provide a clear and coherent example with proper linking words.

例: I like rings and bracelets because they can enhance my appearance. For example, when I attend a wedding party, I usually wear rings and bracelets to make my outfit look more casual and stylish.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct prepositions and plural forms, and avoid filler words. Also, clarify the currency and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I usually buy jewelry and spend about 500 units of currency on it. For example, this month I spent around 502 buying two rings and three bracelets on an e-commerce site, especially Shopee.

提案: Your answer conveys a good idea but has grammatical mistakes and filler words. Use complete sentences and correct expressions. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it becomes a habit and holds special meaning for them. For example, I always wear a ring that my mother gave me because it reminds me of her wherever I go.

× my skin comes itchy when I whenever I wear rings or brackets

✓ my skin becomes itchy whenever I wear rings or bracelets

The verb 'comes' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'becomes' to indicate a change of state. Also, 'whenever' is sufficient without 'when'. Additionally, 'brackets' should be 'bracelets' as 'brackets' is not a type of jewelry. Use 'becomes itchy' to describe the skin's reaction.

× I like rings and brackets because it can boost my appearance

✓ I like rings and bracelets because they can boost my appearance

The subject 'rings and bracelets' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' instead of 'it'. Also, 'brackets' is incorrect; the correct word is 'bracelets'. The verb 'can' agrees with the plural subject 'they'.

× at the time I had an invitation especially in party wedding party and I use ring and records to make my appearance, uh, more casual

✓ at that time I had an invitation, especially to a wedding party, and I used rings and bracelets to make my appearance more casual

The verb 'use' should be in past tense 'used' to match the past context. 'Records' is incorrect; it should be 'bracelets'. Also, the phrase 'in party wedding party' is incorrect; it should be 'to a wedding party'. Proper article usage and word order are corrected.

× I always spend my money around 500 to buy it

✓ I always spend around 500 to buy it

The phrase 'spend my money around 500' is awkward; 'spend around 500' is more natural. Also, 'to buy it' is vague; however, since the context is jewelry, it is acceptable. The verb tense is present simple, which is appropriate here.

× this month I spend around 502 by two rings and three bracelet on uh, e-commerce, especially Shopee

✓ this month I spent around 502 buying two rings and three bracelets on e-commerce, especially Shopee

Since 'this month' refers to a completed action, the past tense 'spent' is appropriate. 'By' is incorrect; 'buying' is the correct gerund form to indicate the action. 'Bracelet' should be plural 'bracelets' to match the quantity.

× it's a usual things for them

✓ it's a usual thing for them

'Things' is plural but preceded by 'a', which is singular. The correct phrase is 'a usual thing' to maintain singular agreement.

× I always wear ring because that ring is from my mother

✓ I always wear a ring because that ring is from my mother

The noun 'ring' is countable and singular, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.