Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有语法错误，表达不够自然，且信息不够具体。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且说明为什么佩戴珠宝危险。

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because my university has rules against wearing too much jewelry for safety reasons.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不准确，语法错误较多。建议使用正确的词汇表达喜好，并且说明原因。

例: I like necklaces because I think they can enhance a person's appearance and make them look more attractive.

提案: 回答较为简洁，但缺少细节和连贯性。建议增加连接词并说明不买珠宝的具体原因。

例: Actually, I don't usually buy jewelry because I prefer simple accessories and I don't like wearing too many ornaments.

提案: 回答不连贯，语法和词汇错误较多，表达不清晰。建议明确表达观点，使用恰当词汇，并且组织完整句子。

例: I think some people wear jewelry for a long time because it makes them look more attractive or shows their wealth and status.

× No, because I am a student in the university and the school requires us not to wear much more jewel because it is very dangerous.

✓ No, because I am a student at the university and the school requires us not to wear too much jewelry because it is very dangerous.

这里“much more jewel”用法错误，jewel是可数名词，且此处应使用不可数名词“jewelry”表示“珠宝”，且“much more”用法不当，应改为“too much”表示“过多”。另外，介词应为“at the university”。

× Maybe I like the neckline because I think it can make somebody looks much handsome.

✓ Maybe I like necklaces because I think they can make somebody look much more handsome.

“neckline”指的是衣服的领口，不是珠宝，应改为“necklaces”（项链）。动词“make”后接动词原形“look”，而不是“looks”。“much handsome”应改为“much more handsome”表示程度比较。

× Actually not, because I don't like to wear jewelry, so I don't buy jewelry.

✓ Actually not, because I don't like to wear jewelry, so I don't buy jewelry.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× Uh, I think maybe they want to make them look so more pretty or choose their. Wealth.

✓ Uh, I think maybe they want to make themselves look prettier or show their wealth.

“make them look”应为“make themselves look”，反身代词用错。形容词“pretty”比较级应为“prettier”，而不是“so more pretty”。“choose their wealth”语义不通，应为“show their wealth”。