Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu word choice o natural na. Apni bolte paren "No, I don't often wear jewelry. When I do, I prefer simple pieces like earrings and bracelets because I worry about them getting stolen." Erokom answer ta beshi natural ar clear hobe.

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry. When I do, I prefer simple pieces like earrings and bracelets because I worry about them getting stolen.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu word repetition ache, ar sentence structure aro natural kora jete pare. Apni bolte paren, "I generally like silver jewelry because it complements my skin tone. I prefer minimal pieces like earrings, bracelets, and sometimes anklets, which I often order."

例: I generally like silver jewelry because it complements my skin tone. I prefer minimal pieces like earrings, bracelets, and sometimes anklets, which I often order.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu grammar error ache ar sentence gulo clear na. Apni bolte paren, "No, I don't usually buy jewelry. I only buy it on special occasions. However, my family and friends often gift me different kinds of jewelry, so I have a large collection."

例: No, I don't usually buy jewelry. I only buy it on special occasions. However, my family and friends often gift me different kinds of jewelry, so I have a large collection.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu unclear part ache ar word repetition o ache. Apni bolte paren, "In my country, Hindu women wear Shaka and Paula as a symbol of their marriage throughout their lives. So, I think people wear jewelry for religious reasons or as a fashion statement."

例: In my country, Hindu women wear Shaka and Paula as a symbol of their marriage throughout their lives. So, I think people wear jewelry for religious reasons or as a fashion statement.

× No, I don't avoid jewelry.

✓ No, I don't wear jewelry.

The original sentence uses 'don't avoid' which implies a negative meaning opposite to the intended one. The student means they do not wear jewelry, so 'don't wear' is the correct modal verb usage here.

× I don't wear jewelry because, uh, it's chance to get stolen, so I don't.

✓ I don't wear jewelry because there's a chance it can get stolen, so I don't.

The phrase 'it's chance' is incorrect; it should be 'there's a chance' to indicate possibility. Also, 'it can get stolen' clarifies the risk. This corrects the 'There be issue' and improves clarity.

× I generally like silver jewellery because it suits my face and my body tone and I definitely like minimal jewellery like earring and a bracelet.

✓ I generally like silver jewellery because it suits my face and my body tone and I definitely like minimal jewellery like earrings and a bracelet.

The word 'earring' should be plural 'earrings' because it refers to a pair, which is the usual way to describe this jewelry item. This corrects the singular and plural issue.

× I sometimes wear anklet so these are the things I order.

✓ I sometimes wear anklets, so these are the things I order.

The word 'anklet' should be plural 'anklets' to match the plural 'things' and to indicate more than one item. Also, a comma is added before 'so' for correct sentence structure.

× But my family and friends I have tendency to gift me different kind of jewelry.

✓ But my family and friends have a tendency to gift me different kinds of jewelry.

The original sentence lacks proper subject-verb agreement and correct article usage. 'I have tendency' is incorrect; it should be 'have a tendency' referring to 'my family and friends'. Also, 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to match 'jewelry'.

× So I have a lot lot of collection of different types of ornaments.

✓ So I have a lot of collections of different types of ornaments.

The phrase 'a lot lot of collection' is incorrect. It should be 'a lot of collections' or 'a large collection'. Also, 'collection' is countable here, so plural 'collections' fits better with 'different types'.

× In my country, Hindu women are deservedly aware of Shaka and Paula throughout their life in memory of their husband Umm.

✓ In my country, Hindu women wear Shaka and Paula throughout their lives in memory of their husbands.

The phrase 'are deservedly aware of' is incorrect; the intended meaning is that women wear these items. Also, 'life' should be plural 'lives' to match plural 'women', and 'husband' should be plural 'husbands' to match plural subject.

× So I think it's a religious reason or a fashionable fashionable reason that they keep wearing jewellery.

✓ So I think it's either a religious reason or a fashionable reason that they keep wearing jewellery.

The phrase 'or a fashionable fashionable reason' repeats 'fashionable' unnecessarily. Also, 'either...or' is the correct conjunction structure to present two alternatives.