Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but you can improve by correcting minor errors and making your response more natural. For example, instead of 'like stirs or necklaces', you could say 'such as rings or necklaces'. Also, try to avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly.

例: No, I don't wear jewelry often because I find it uncomfortable. However, on special occasions such as wedding anniversaries and parties, I prefer to wear elegant pieces like rings or necklaces.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but can be improved by using more natural sentence structures and linking words. For example, instead of short fragmented sentences, try to combine them using connectors like 'because' or 'as'. Also, be consistent with spelling (jewellery/jewelry).

例: I like simple, lightweight jewellery because I find elegant pieces more comfortable for daily use. On the other hand, heavyweight jewelry feels very uncomfortable to me.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words and correcting minor grammar issues. For example, use 'because I rarely wear it' (singular) and 'which I received as gifts at my wedding'.

例: No, I don't buy jewelry very often because I rarely wear it, and I already have a lot of jewellery that I received as gifts at my wedding.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and uses linking words effectively. To improve, you can make your language more natural by replacing 'maybe' with 'perhaps' and using 'to' instead of 'with' after 'attachment'.

例: I think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because they do not have time to buy a new one. Additionally, they may have sentimental attachment to the item or want to maintain consistency with their style.

× I prefer to wear some elegant pieces of jewelry like stirs or necklaces.

✓ I prefer to wear some elegant pieces of jewelry like rings or necklaces.

The word 'stirs' is incorrect in this context; it seems to be a typo or misuse. The correct plural noun related to jewelry is 'rings'. This correction ensures the sentence uses the correct plural noun referring to jewelry items.

× I like simple jewellery, lightweight.

✓ I like simple, lightweight jewellery.

The original sentence incorrectly separates 'simple' and 'lightweight' without proper punctuation or conjunction. Combining the adjectives with a comma correctly modifies 'jewellery' and improves sentence clarity.

× Heavyweight jewelry I find very uncomfortable.

✓ Heavyweight jewelry, I find very uncomfortable.

A comma is needed after 'Heavyweight jewelry' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause, improving readability and sentence structure.

× No, I do not buy jewelry very often because I rarely wear them and I also have a lot of jewellery which I received as gifts at the time of my wedding.

✓ No, I do not buy jewelry very often because I rarely wear it and I also have a lot of jewellery which I received as gifts at the time of my wedding.

The pronoun 'them' is plural, but 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun treated as singular. Therefore, 'it' should be used instead of 'them' to maintain agreement between the noun and pronoun.