Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question and providing clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

例: I don't often wear jewelry because my mother thinks it might attract unwanted attention, especially when I'm abroad. Since I'm a student, I prefer to keep things simple.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct vocabulary mistakes. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'the goods' and specify what you mean.

例: I like simple and elegant jewelry, especially gold pieces. In the future, when I start working, I plan to buy some gold jewelry for myself.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains unclear phrases. Make sure to answer the question directly and provide specific reasons with correct vocabulary. Also, avoid sentence fragments and ensure coherence.

例: I don't usually buy jewelry, but I prefer simple and elegant pieces because they complement a wide range of outfits and have a timeless appeal.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically, using appropriate vocabulary. Explain reasons why people might keep jewelry for a long time, such as sentimental value or uniqueness.

例: I think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because it has sentimental value or is unique. They may also like to wear expensive jewelry that holds special meaning to them.

× Not really because nowadays I'm just a student so I my mother don't want me to wear expensive jewelry because she think it will give gives me more dangerous in foreign countries.

✓ Not really because nowadays I'm just a student, so my mother doesn't want me to wear expensive jewelry because she thinks it will put me in more danger in foreign countries.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and subject-verb agreement. 'I my mother' is incorrect; it should be 'my mother'. Also, 'don't' should be 'doesn't' to agree with the singular subject 'my mother'. 'She think' should be 'she thinks' for third person singular. 'Give gives me more dangerous' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'put me in more danger'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Not really because nowadays I'm just a student so I my mother don't want me to wear expensive jewelry because she think it will give gives me more dangerous in foreign countries.

✓ Not really because nowadays I'm just a student, so my mother doesn't want me to wear expensive jewelry because she thinks it will put me in more danger in foreign countries.

The verbs 'don't' and 'think' do not agree with the third person singular subject 'my mother'. They should be 'doesn't' and 'thinks' respectively to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× I prefer wearing simple and elegant jewelry, but I really like the gold, so if I go to the job in future, I will buy the goods for myself.

✓ I prefer wearing simple and elegant jewelry, but I really like gold, so if I get a job in the future, I will buy jewelry for myself.

The phrase 'go to the job' is incorrect; it should be 'get a job'. Also, 'the gold' is incorrect because 'gold' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. 'The goods' is vague; 'jewelry' is more appropriate here. These changes improve naturalness and correctness.

× I prefer wearing simple and elegant jewelry, but I really like the gold, so if I go to the job in future, I will buy the goods for myself.

✓ I prefer wearing simple and elegant jewelry, but I really like gold, so if I get a job in the future, I will buy jewelry for myself.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'gold' and 'goods'. 'Gold' is a material noun and does not require 'the'. 'Goods' is too general; 'jewelry' fits better. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future'.

× I prefer wearing simple and elegant jewelry because it's complement and. Wide range of outfits and has a timeless April.

✓ I prefer wearing simple and elegant jewelry because it complements a wide range of outfits and has a timeless appeal.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect words. 'It's complement and.' is incomplete and should be 'it complements'. 'Wide range of outfits' needs an article 'a'. 'Timeless April' is a typo; it should be 'timeless appeal'. These corrections fix sentence structure and word choice.

× Because I think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because they think the jewelry is worse and very different. So they that they really like to wear the expensive gallery.

✓ Because I think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because they think the jewelry is worth a lot and very unique. So they really like to wear expensive jewelry.

The sentence has pronoun and word choice errors. 'Worse' should be 'worth'. 'They that they' is incorrect and should be 'they'. 'Gallery' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is appropriate. These corrections improve clarity and correctness.