Jewelry— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, avoiding redundancy and filler words. Use correct sentence structures and provide specific supporting details with linking words.

例: No, I don't often wear jewelry because in my country, it is mostly worn by women. For example, last week I bought a piece of jewelry as a gift for my mother, and she really enjoyed it.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Focus on answering the question directly with clear sentences. Use appropriate vocabulary and linking words to explain your opinion with specific examples.

例: To be honest, I am not very interested in jewelry. However, my mother prefers watches as jewelry. For example, when I give her a watch, she feels very happy.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct verb forms and explain your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons or examples.

例: Actually, I usually buy jewelry for my wife, mother, and sister because it helps strengthen our relationships. For example, last week I bought a gift for my mother, which made us feel closer.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and use correct sentence structures. Provide specific reasons and examples with appropriate linking words.

例: In my opinion, some people wear jewelry for a long time because they believe it helps reduce stress and anxiety. For example, my mother feels calmer when she wears her jewelry.

× Actually, no, because jewelry is available only the, for the woman in my country.

✓ Actually, no, because jewelry is available only for women in my country.

The preposition 'for' should be followed directly by the noun without 'the' in this context. Also, 'woman' should be plural 'women' to refer to the group in general.

× last week I have a quote, a jewelry for my mom, uh, buy a gift and uh, she really enjoyable with that.

✓ last week I bought a piece of jewelry for my mom as a gift and she really enjoyed it.

The past tense 'have' is incorrect here; it should be 'bought' to indicate a completed action in the past. 'Enjoyable' is an adjective, but the correct verb form is 'enjoyed'. Also, 'a quote' is incorrect and 'a piece of jewelry' is the correct phrase.

× To be honest, I don't interesting in the journey but I can say that my mom really prefer to get a watch during which is preferred for her hair.

✓ To be honest, I am not interested in jewelry but I can say that my mom really prefers to get a watch which suits her style.

The verb 'interesting' should be 'interested' to describe the subject's feeling. 'Prefer' needs to be in third person singular 'prefers' to agree with 'my mom'. 'During which is preferred for her hair' is unclear and incorrect; it is replaced with a clearer phrase.

× For example, when I put a watch for her he she's really happy.

✓ For example, when I put a watch on her, she is really happy.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect here and should be removed. Also, 'put a watch for her' should be 'put a watch on her' to use the correct preposition.

× Actually, I usually pay a jewelry for my wife and my mother and sister because they told me to develop a relationship together.

✓ Actually, I usually buy jewelry for my wife, my mother, and my sister because they told me it helps develop our relationship.

The verb 'pay' is incorrect; 'buy' is appropriate when purchasing items. Also, 'a jewelry' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is uncountable and does not need an article. The phrase 'to develop a relationship together' is awkward and corrected for clarity.

× For example, last week when I bought a gift for my mother. It's help us to be more confident.

✓ For example, last week when I bought a gift for my mother, it helped us to be more confident.

The sentence fragment is corrected by combining the two parts. 'It's help' is incorrect; the past tense 'helped' is needed to match the past action.

× In my opinion, I think people were a piece of jewelry for a long time because they believe tell him to reduce stress and anxiety.

✓ In my opinion, I think people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because they believe it helps reduce stress and anxiety.

'Were' is the past tense of 'wear' but the present tense 'wear' is appropriate here. 'Tell him' is incorrect and replaced with 'it helps' to convey the intended meaning.

× For example, my mother when she wear a jewellery he it helps him to reduce stress.

✓ For example, when my mother wears jewelry, it helps her reduce stress.

'He' and 'him' are incorrect pronouns referring to 'my mother' who is female; 'her' is correct. 'Wear' should be 'wears' to agree with third person singular subject.