Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer should be more natural and clear. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words. For example, say "I am quite interested in geography because it helps me understand nature better."

例: I am quite interested in geography because it helps me understand nature better. Moreover, it explains how different environments affect human life, which I find fascinating.

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific. For example, start with a clear statement, then explain why geography is useful.

例: Absolutely, geography is very useful because it helps individuals understand the environment and how it affects us. For instance, learning about climate change can guide us to protect nature better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Focus on giving a direct answer with clear supporting details. Avoid unnecessary words and correct grammar mistakes.

例: Yes, I studied geography at school. It taught me about the earth, different climates, and natural resources, which I found very interesting.

提案: Make your answer more structured and clear. Use proper grammar and linking words. Express your interest and give reasons why you want to be a geography teacher.

例: Honestly, if I get the opportunity, I would like to become a geography teacher because I am very interested in the subject. Also, I enjoy sharing knowledge about nature and have even helped my brother learn geography.

提案: Your answer should be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about benefits.

例: Of course, I would like to learn more about the geography of other countries because it broadens my understanding of the world. This knowledge can help me give useful advice to others.

× Well, I'm kinda interesting in geography.

✓ Well, I'm kinda interested in geography.

The verb 'interesting' is incorrect here; the correct form is the past participle 'interested' to describe a feeling or state. 'Interesting' describes something that causes interest, while 'interested' describes the feeling of the subject.

× There are a number of subjects in mask and do school, but my favorite one is geography because there is a brief information about a nature.

✓ There are a number of subjects in my school, but my favorite one is geography because there is brief information about nature.

The phrase 'in mask and do school' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; it should be 'in my school'. Also, 'a brief information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. The article 'a' should be removed. Additionally, 'about a nature' is incorrect; 'nature' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× So I'm like a nature person, so that's why I like.

✓ So I like nature, that's why I like it.

The sentence 'I'm like a nature person' is awkward; better to say 'I like nature'. Also, the phrase 'that's why I like' is incomplete and needs an object, so 'it' is added to clarify what is liked.

× Absolutely, it is very useful for individual because I think that all individual have knowledge about the environment and nature.

✓ Absolutely, it is very useful for individuals because I think that all individuals have knowledge about the environment and nature.

The word 'individual' should be plural 'individuals' to refer to people in general. Also, the verb 'have' agrees with the plural subject 'individuals'.

× So geographies are specific about the nature and environment as well As for earth.

✓ So geography is specific about nature and the environment as well as the earth.

'Geographies' is incorrect; 'geography' is an uncountable noun here. Also, 'nature' and 'earth' do not need 'the' before 'nature' but 'the earth' is correct. The phrase 'as well As for earth' is awkward and corrected to 'as well as the earth'.

× So yes it is a useful for all of people.

✓ So yes, it is useful for all people.

The article 'a' before 'useful' is incorrect because 'useful' is an adjective, not a noun. Also, 'all of people' should be 'all people'.

× Yes, uh, definitely when I was in my school, I learn to Jabref in every class there is a sub parts of geography because I think that geography gives us very kind of information about nature.

✓ Yes, uh, definitely when I was in school, I learned about geography in every class; there were sub-parts of geography because I think that geography gives us various kinds of information about nature.

The verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to match the past time 'when I was in school'. 'In my school' is better as 'in school'. 'Sub parts' should be 'sub-parts'. 'Very kind of information' is incorrect; 'various kinds of information' is appropriate.

× We know everything about the globe and nature, water and air everything.

✓ We know everything about the globe, nature, water, and air.

The phrase 'nature, water and air everything' is awkward; listing the items with commas and 'and' is clearer. 'Everything' at the end is redundant.

× So I think that I learned a lot of things about geography mask under score.

✓ So I think that I learned a lot of things about geography.

The phrase 'mask under score' seems to be an error or irrelevant; it is removed. The rest is correct in past tense.

× Honestly speaking if I got a golden opportunity in upcoming time so definitely I will become a geography teacher.

✓ Honestly speaking, if I get a golden opportunity in the upcoming time, I will definitely become a geography teacher.

The conditional sentence requires present tense 'get' in the 'if' clause for future meaning. 'So' is unnecessary and removed. 'Definitely' is better placed before the verb.

× First of all am keen interested in geography subject as well as I always give suggestion about nature and averaging and as well as I also.

✓ First of all, I am keenly interested in the geography subject, and I always give suggestions about nature and the environment as well.

The pronoun 'am' is missing 'I'. 'Keen interested' should be 'keenly interested'. 'Give suggestion' should be 'give suggestions'. 'Averaging' is likely a mishearing of 'environment'. The sentence is incomplete and corrected accordingly.

× I thought my brother about the geography.

✓ I taught my brother about geography.

The verb 'thought' is incorrect; the correct past tense verb for teaching is 'taught'. 'The geography' should be 'geography' without 'the'.

× Of course, I I always like to be learn about the geography of foreign other nations because I think that it also gives me a lot of knowledge about the globe and I think that it could be good for me as well as beneficial for me with the help of it.

✓ Of course, I always like to learn about the geography of foreign countries because I think that it also gives me a lot of knowledge about the globe, and I think that it could be good and beneficial for me.

The phrase 'like to be learn' is incorrect; it should be 'like to learn'. 'Foreign other nations' is redundant; 'foreign countries' is better. The sentence is simplified for clarity.

× I also give a suggestion to another people.

✓ I also give suggestions to other people.

'A suggestion' should be plural 'suggestions' to match the general meaning. 'Another people' is incorrect; 'other people' is correct.