Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit lengthy and repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I enjoy studying geography because it helps me understand the Earth's locations and features. Since childhood, I've been curious about the places where we live, which makes geography fascinating to me.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more confidently and structure your answer clearly with linking words. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: Yes, geography is very useful in daily life and research. For example, it helps us discover hidden features of the Earth and understand unknown elements better.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words and more specific details. Also, avoid ending with vague statements like 'explore more about the unknown'.

例: Yes, I studied geography as a child. I learned about different types of maps and how countries are connected. This knowledge sparked my interest to learn more about unfamiliar places.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains many filler words. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I don't want to be a geography teacher because my dream is to become an ethical hacker. However, if I had to choose another subject, geography would be my second choice.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to organize your ideas logically and avoid filler words. Also, clarify your last sentence for better understanding.

例: Yes, I love learning about the geography of other countries because my curiosity motivates me. For instance, I want to study America's geography to help me plan building a house there.

× When I was a child, I used to study geography and I love the subject because I like to know about the geographical location of our earth and it intrigues me a lot to get to know more about the place where we live in.

✓ When I was a child, I used to study geography and I loved the subject because I liked to know about the geographical location of our earth and it intrigued me a lot to get to know more about the place where we live in.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the context is about the past ('When I was a child'), verbs should be in past tense ('loved', 'liked', 'intrigued') to maintain consistency.

× Well, I think geography is quite useful in our daily life, uh, research in research purposes, it has helped a lot to discover various, uh, unhidden features of which is, uh, a good way to explore more about the, uh, unknown elements that are present on Earth.

✓ Well, I think geography is quite useful in our daily life and research purposes. It has helped a lot to discover various hidden features, which is a good way to explore more about the unknown elements that are present on Earth.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be split into two sentences and rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness. 'Unhidden' is incorrect; 'hidden' is appropriate here.

× Yes, I have learned geography. When I was a child, I used to have a subject of geography in which I learned about the different types of maps and how different countries are connected with each other.

✓ Yes, I have learned geography. When I was a child, I used to have geography as a subject in which I learned about the different types of maps and how different countries are connected with each other.

The phrase 'have a subject of geography' is awkward. It is better to say 'have geography as a subject'. The rest is correct.

× And I like to explore more about the unknown.

✓ I also like to explore more about the unknown.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and can be avoided in formal speech. Also, 'like to explore more about the unknown' is acceptable but adding 'also' improves flow.

× Well, I don't want to be a geography teacher because, uh, my dreams are about becoming an ethical hacker.

✓ Well, I don't want to be a geography teacher because my dream is to become an ethical hacker.

The phrase 'my dreams are about becoming' is awkward. It is better to say 'my dream is to become'. Also, 'don't want to be' is correct here.

× But, uh, if I had the chance to go back and choose another subject, then definitely geography would be my second favorite.

✓ But if I had the chance to go back and choose another subject, then definitely geography would be my second favorite.

The sentence is correct but removing unnecessary fillers like 'uh' and the comma after 'But' improves clarity and fluency.

× Start any I love to learn more about the geography of other countries and, uh, I'm a very keen person and, uh, curiosity helps me to explore more about their geographical features of, uh, other countries.

✓ Actually, I love to learn more about the geography of other countries. I'm a very keen person, and my curiosity helps me explore more about their geographical features.

The original sentence is confusing and contains filler words. 'Start any' is unclear and likely a mishearing or error. Splitting into two sentences and removing fillers improves clarity.

× And I'll have to, uh, explore about America to build this house.

✓ And I'll have to explore America to build this house.

The phrase 'explore about America' is incorrect. The verb 'explore' is transitive and does not require 'about'. Removing 'about' corrects the sentence.