Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然，但有些表达重复且略显冗长。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达“broaden my horizon”，并使用更多连接词使回答更连贯。

例: I enjoy geography because it allows me to learn about different cultures and landscapes through documentaries and travel, which helps me relax and expand my perspective.

提案: 回答内容重复“broaden my horizon”，且句子结构不够流畅。建议使用更丰富的词汇，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更自然。

例: Yes, geography is very useful because it helps me understand various places, cultures, terrains, and climates, which not only expands my knowledge but also gives me a sense of achievement.

提案: 回答中“compulsory license”表达不准确，且句子连接不够自然。建议使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I have studied geography because it is a compulsory subject in my country's education system, and I enjoy it, which is why I usually get good grades.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但句子中“so”重复使用，影响流畅度。建议使用不同的连接词或句型使表达更自然。

例: I am currently majoring in finance, which is unrelated to geography, so I don't plan to become a geography teacher in the future.

提案: 回答中填充词过多，影响流畅性。建议减少“umm”“uh”等语气词，简化句子结构，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, in the future, I would like to learn more about the geography of different countries as a hobby. Besides watching documentaries, I plan to travel around the world to gain wonderful experiences and broaden my perspective.

× I really enjoy learning some different cultures and landscapes, so it can be seen as a way for me to unwind myself and broaden my horizon.

✓ I really enjoy learning about different cultures and landscapes, so it can be seen as a way for me to unwind myself and broaden my horizon.

动词enjoy后面应接动名词形式，且搭配习惯是enjoy learning about某事，而不是直接加some different cultures。这里应去掉some并加介词about。

× I really enjoy learning some different cultures and landscapes, so it can be seen as a way for me to unwind myself and broaden my horizon.

✓ I really enjoy learning about different cultures and landscapes, so it can be seen as a way for me to unwind myself and broaden my horizons.

horizon通常用复数形式表示视野、眼界，broaden one's horizons是固定搭配，表示开阔眼界。

× Learning geography can make me learn more different places, cultures and terrain, and also different climates.

✓ Learning geography can help me learn about more different places, cultures, terrains, and also different climates.

terrain是可数名词，表示地形，应使用复数terrains。

× Learning geography can make me learn more different places, cultures and terrain, and also different climates.

✓ Learning geography can help me learn about more different places, cultures, terrains, and also different climates.

make sb do sth结构中动词用原形，但这里表达更自然的是help sb do sth，且learn后面习惯加介词about。

× because geography can be seen as a compulsory license in our country's educational system.

✓ because geography can be seen as a compulsory subject in our country's educational system.

license是执照，与语境不符，应改为subject（科目）。

× so I don't really think that my major is relevant to the geography, so I don't want to become a geography teacher in the future.

✓ so I don't really think that my major is relevant to geography, so I don't want to become a geography teacher in the future.

geography前不需要加定冠词the，表示学科时通常不加冠词。

× Yes, umm, in the future, uh, as a hobby, I would like to learn more about the geography in different uh, uh, countries.

✓ Yes, umm, in the future, uh, as a hobby, I would like to learn more about the geography of different uh, uh, countries.

表示某地的地理时，习惯用geography of某地，而不是geography in某地。

× It can be quite effective for me to broaden my horizon and also umm, have some really wonderful experience.

✓ It can be quite effective for me to broaden my horizons and also umm, have some really wonderful experiences.

broaden one's horizons是固定搭配，experience在此处应使用复数形式experiences，表示多次经历。