Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and use clearer linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'which nature is more good for individuals'. Instead, use simpler and more natural expressions.

例: I like geography because it helps me understand the world better. For example, I learn about different landscapes, deserts, and oceans, and how they affect the living creatures there.

提案: Your answer has some unclear phrases like 'one can not easily enhance their knowledge'. Please focus on clarity and avoid double negatives. Use linking words to organise your points logically and provide specific examples.

例: I think geography is very useful because it helps us learn about countries, their boundaries, rivers, and natural features. For instance, knowing about rivers can help in understanding water resources.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about what you learned. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'I learn' to 'I learned'.

例: Yes, I have learned geography both in school and in my current course. For example, I studied the geographical features of Canada and India, which helped me understand different climates and landscapes.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive with 'but' used multiple times. Try to use linking words like 'however' or 'although' to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas.

例: No, I want to become a businessman. Although I am interested in geography because I love travelling and exploring new places, I do not plan to teach it as a career.

提案: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammar mistakes. Use linking words like 'currently', 'previously', and 'in the future' to organise your ideas clearly. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I think so'.

例: Yes, I am currently learning about Canada's geography. Previously, I studied India, and in the future, I plan to learn about countries like America and Australia because it is beneficial to know about the world.

× I like geography, I think so it's kind of interesting and it's very enjoyable for people to know more about the world.

✓ I like geography; I think it is kind of interesting and very enjoyable for people to learn more about the world.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I think so' which is unnecessary and awkward here. Also, 'to know more' should be 'to learn more' for better expression. The sentence structure is improved by separating clauses properly.

× With the help of geography, one can easily enhance their knowledge regarding the globe and everything regarding landscape, deserts, oceans and where the creature is present and which nature is more good for individuals.

✓ With the help of geography, one can easily enhance one's knowledge regarding the globe and everything about landscapes, deserts, oceans, where creatures are present, and which environments are better for individuals.

The pronoun 'their' does not agree with the singular indefinite pronoun 'one'; it should be 'one's'. Also, 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'. 'Which nature is more good' is incorrect; it should be 'which environments are better' for clarity and correctness.

× With the help of geography, one can not easily enhance their knowledge regarding world.

✓ With the help of geography, one cannot easily enhance their knowledge regarding the world.

The modal verb 'cannot' should be written as one word. Also, 'world' needs the definite article 'the' before it. The pronoun 'their' should be 'one's' to agree with 'one' but since 'their' is commonly used, it can be accepted informally.

× With the help of geography, one can not easily enhance their knowledge regarding world.

✓ With the help of geography, one cannot easily enhance their knowledge regarding the world.

The noun 'world' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific entity known to both speaker and listener.

× It will also help the individual to know more about the world where the things are present, about the boundaries, rivers and greenery and many more things.

✓ It will also help the individual to know more about the world, where things are present, including boundaries, rivers, greenery, and many more things.

The phrase 'where the things are present' is awkward; 'things' should not have 'the' here. Also, the sentence is improved by adding commas and clarifying the list.

× And nowadays, uh, in my course it I also have one, uh, subject where I can learn about the geography.

✓ And nowadays, in my course, I also have one subject where I can learn about geography.

The phrase 'it I also have' is incorrect and redundant. 'Geography' does not need 'the' before it here. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× And, uh, I learned a lot of the geographical conditions about Canada right now in past.

✓ And I have learned a lot about the geographical conditions of Canada recently.

The phrase 'right now in past' is contradictory and incorrect. 'Learned' should be in present perfect tense 'have learned' to indicate recent experience. 'About Canada' is better than 'about the Canada'.

× I know a lot of about the India.

✓ I know a lot about India.

The definite article 'the' is not used before country names like 'India'. Also, 'know a lot of about' is incorrect; it should be 'know a lot about'.

× But I like to know more about the geography as I am a traveling buff and love to explore new places.

✓ But I like to know more about geography as I am a travel buff and love to explore new places.

'The geography' is incorrect; 'geography' as a subject does not need 'the'. 'Traveling buff' is better expressed as 'travel buff'.

× But I don't think so I want to go in this field for teaching others.

✓ But I don't think I want to go into this field to teach others.

The phrase 'go in this field' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go into'. Also, 'for teaching others' is better expressed as 'to teach others'.

× Yes, as nowadays I'm learning geography about the Canadian region in past I know about the India and in future I think so it's also very beneficial for me to know about more about the other countries, about the whole world nowadays I think so I'm also trying to know a little bit about the America as well as Australia.

✓ Yes, nowadays I'm learning geography about the Canadian region. In the past, I knew about India, and in the future, I think it will be very beneficial for me to learn more about other countries and the whole world. Nowadays, I am also trying to learn a little bit about America as well as Australia.

The original sentence is a run-on with tense inconsistencies. 'In past' should be 'in the past' and 'know' should be past tense 'knew'. 'I think so' is unnecessary. 'Know about more about' is redundant; 'learn more about' is better. 'The America' is incorrect; 'America' does not need 'the'. The sentence is split for clarity and correct tense usage.