Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is informative but a bit wordy and slightly unclear in parts. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'.

例: I like geography because it helps us understand different places better. For example, it provides details about landscapes, terrains, and even weather patterns, which are useful for planning trips or studying nature.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to organise your ideas logically and use linking words like 'because' or 'for instance' to explain why geography is useful. Also, avoid repeating similar points and focus on specific examples.

例: Absolutely, geography is very useful because it helps us predict weather and understand seasons. For instance, when planning a trip, knowing about landscapes, rivers, and seas can be very helpful.

提案: Your answer is good but a bit long and could be clearer with better sentence structure. Try to start with a direct answer, then add specific details using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, I studied geography from the 7th grade in high school. I enjoyed it because I learned about seasons, landscapes, and natural features like mountains and rivers, which helped me understand why these things happen.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid unnecessary words and be more direct. Use linking words like 'if' and 'because' to explain your thoughts.

例: Yes, I have thought about becoming a geography teacher because I enjoy the subject. If I get the chance to study again, I would definitely choose it.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is a bit confusing and lacks smooth flow. Try to organise your answer with clear topic sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to connect ideas. Also, avoid awkward phrasing and be more concise.

例: Absolutely, I am interested in learning about the geography of other countries. For example, I like to study their landscapes, weather, and seasons because it helps me understand their culture and natural environment better.

× It gives a detailed information about the landscapes, the terrains, the roads and structures, and what we can expect in nature, and even about the weather and the wind.

✓ It gives detailed information about the landscapes, the terrains, the roads and structures, and what we can expect in nature, and even about the weather and the wind.

The word 'information' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a'. Using 'a detailed information' is incorrect; it should be 'detailed information' without the article.

× Without geography, we wouldn't have much knowledge about the weather forecast or understand the weather or the seasons of a place and also the landscapes if you plan a trip and also the rivers, the seas, the oceans, they have all the useful and information.

✓ Without geography, we wouldn't have much knowledge about the weather forecast or understand the weather or the seasons of a place, and also the landscapes if you plan a trip, and also the rivers, the seas, the oceans; they all have useful information.

The phrase 'all the useful and information' is incorrect. 'Information' is uncountable and should not be combined with 'and' in this way. The correct phrase is 'all have useful information'. Also, the sentence needed punctuation for clarity.

× Yes, In my high schools, starting from the 7th standard, geography was a subject, and it was also one of the subjects I liked the most because that was when I first understood the seasons properly and the landscapes, the mountains, the hills, the rivers, the seas, why things happen for those reasons.

✓ Yes, in my high school, starting from the 7th standard, geography was a subject, and it was also one of the subjects I liked the most because that was when I first understood the seasons properly and the landscapes, the mountains, the hills, the rivers, the seas, and why things happen for those reasons.

The phrase 'high schools' should be singular 'high school' when referring to the general institution attended. Also, a missing conjunction 'and' before 'why things happen' improves sentence flow.

× Yes, Loki, I do thought about being a geography teacher, provided that I should be very good with the subject.

✓ Yes, Loki, I have thought about being a geography teacher, provided that I am very good with the subject.

The phrase 'I do thought' is incorrect because 'do' is an auxiliary verb used with the base form of the verb. The correct form is 'I have thought' to indicate past experience relevant to the present. Also, 'should be' is better replaced with 'am' to express current ability.

× And yes, if I'm given the opportunity to study again, maybe yes, I'll choose it.

✓ And yes, if I'm given the opportunity to study again, maybe I will choose it.

The phrase 'maybe yes, I'll choose it' is awkward. 'Maybe I will choose it' is clearer and grammatically correct for expressing future intention.

× Absolutely. This is one of a subject of interest.

✓ Absolutely. This is one of the subjects of interest.

The phrase 'one of a subject' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'one of the subjects' because 'one of' is followed by a plural noun with a definite article.

× When I look at according to the first thing I look at is how the landscapes are, how the weather is there and how the season goes about.

✓ When I look, the first thing I look at is how the landscapes are, how the weather is there, and how the season goes about.

The phrase 'When I look at according to' is incorrect and confusing. It should be simplified to 'When I look,' to correctly introduce the observation. Also, commas improve clarity.

× It is an interesting subject to learn about the country as it provides you information about their culture and the nature.

✓ It is an interesting subject to learn about the country as it provides you information about its culture and nature.

The pronoun 'their' is plural and does not agree with the singular noun 'country'. The correct possessive pronoun is 'its'. Also, 'the nature' should be 'nature' without the article.