Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question and providing clear supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like "cultural virtual person" and improve sentence structure.

例: I'm not very fond of geography as a subject, but I enjoy learning about different countries' histories through YouTube videos and apps.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured with good use of examples. To improve, try to avoid filler words like "Absolutely, Yeah" and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, geography is very useful because it helps us understand Earth's landscapes and climates. For example, by studying weather patterns and volcanic activity, we can prepare for natural disasters and protect the environment.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like "understand deeply work and. Appreciating." Try to make your sentences complete and clear, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I studied geography in secondary school. This subject gave me valuable knowledge about natural processes and their impact on the environment, which I found very interesting.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-explained. To improve, try to start with a direct topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't want to be a geography teacher because, although it is a respected profession, it requires patience and communication skills that I lack. Therefore, I prefer to choose a different career.

提案: Avoid filler words like "Umm" and improve grammar, such as "others countries" should be "other countries." Make your answer more natural and concise with clear linking words.

例: I haven't thought about it before, but since I'm interested in geography, I plan to watch videos about other countries to expand my cultural knowledge.

× Honestly, I'm not a big fan of geography subject, but I can say that I'm a cultural virtual person so I tend to watch videos on YouTube that related to other country's history and I also have application.

✓ Honestly, I'm not a big fan of the geography subject, but I can say that I'm a culturally virtual person so I tend to watch videos on YouTube that are related to other countries' history and I also have an application.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'geography subject' to specify the subject. Also, 'other country's history' should be plural possessive 'other countries' history' because it refers to multiple countries. 'I also have application' needs the indefinite article 'an' before 'application' because it is a singular countable noun.

× ...I tend to watch videos on YouTube that related to other country's history...

✓ ...I tend to watch videos on YouTube that are related to other countries' history...

The verb 'related' here functions as a past participle and needs the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the passive voice in present tense. Without 'are', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× ...that related to other country's history...

✓ ...that are related to other countries' history...

The phrase refers to history of multiple countries, so 'country's' should be plural possessive 'countries'' to correctly indicate possession by more than one country.

× I studied geography in the secondary school and so this subject I gained valuable knowledge about natural processes and how they affect the environment.

✓ I studied geography in secondary school and through this subject I gained valuable knowledge about natural processes and how they affect the environment.

The definite article 'the' is not used before 'secondary school' when referring to the general concept of schooling. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding 'through' to clarify the means by which knowledge was gained.

× I found it very interesting because it helped me understand deeply work and. Appreciating.

✓ I found it very interesting because it helped me understand work deeply and appreciate it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction rearranges the sentence to properly connect ideas and uses correct verb forms to express understanding and appreciation.

× Also, teacher is a respected and demanding profession.

✓ Also, teaching is a respected and demanding profession.

'Teacher' is a person, not a profession. The correct noun for the profession is 'teaching'. Alternatively, 'A teacher is a respected and demanding professional' could be used, but here 'teaching' fits better.

× I think that I'm going to watch videos about others countries because it expands my culture knowledge.

✓ I think that I'm going to watch videos about other countries because it expands my cultural knowledge.

'Others countries' is incorrect; 'other countries' is the correct phrase. Also, 'culture knowledge' should be 'cultural knowledge' because 'cultural' is the adjective form modifying 'knowledge'.