Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to be more natural and concise by directly answering the question first, then adding one or two specific details. Avoid complex or unclear phrases like 'deviation towards geography has statistically increased'.

例: I have always liked geography because I am fascinated by the Earth's surface features. For example, I enjoy learning about mountains, rivers, and different landforms.

提案: Your answer covers relevant points but has some unclear phrases like 'impacts the license of the person'. Try to use clearer vocabulary and link your ideas logically. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar landforms multiple times.

例: Yes, geography is useful because it helps us understand landforms like mountains and plains. Moreover, it explains how changes in the Earth's surface affect human life, such as through climate change and global warming.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and uses awkward phrases like 'deviated towards this subject'. Try to answer directly and add specific details with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I studied geography in high school. I enjoyed it because I was curious about different landforms like hills, mountains, and plateaus.

提案: Your answer is honest but uses unclear expressions like 'stubborn project'. Try to express your ideas more naturally and clearly, and keep your answer concise.

例: No, I don't want to be a geography teacher because I find the subject difficult to understand, even though I am interested in Earth's features.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to improve flow. Also, correct small errors like 'physiotherapist but profession'.

例: No, I won't have time to learn about other countries' geography because I work full-time as a physiotherapist and have a busy schedule.

× Since my childhood, I was very much attracted to the topographic conditions of the surface of the earth and was curious to know about the various stratas of the earth surface.

✓ Since my childhood, I have been very much attracted to the topographic conditions of the surface of the earth and have been curious to know about the various strata of the earth's surface.

The sentence talks about a continuous feeling from childhood to present, so present perfect tense ('have been') is appropriate instead of simple past ('was'). Also, 'strata' is the correct plural of 'stratum', and 'earth's surface' needs a possessive apostrophe to be grammatically correct.

× So it was since childhood that my deviation towards geography has statistically increased over the period of time.

✓ So it has been since childhood that my interest in geography has statistically increased over time.

The phrase 'it was since childhood' is incorrect; 'it has been since childhood' correctly expresses a continuing state. Also, 'deviation towards geography' is awkward; 'interest in geography' is more appropriate. 'Over the period of time' is better expressed as 'over time' for naturalness.

× Yes, geography is very useful to know about the various landforms and the feature of the earth service such as the mountains, hills, slopes, plateaus or plains.

✓ Yes, geography is very useful to know about the various landforms and the features of the earth's surface such as mountains, hills, slopes, plateaus, or plains.

'Feature' should be plural 'features' to match 'various landforms'. 'Earth service' is incorrect; it should be 'earth's surface' with possessive form. Also, articles before plural nouns are unnecessary here.

× It also tells us about as the surface changes, how it impacts the license of the person.

✓ It also tells us how changes in the surface impact a person's life.

The phrase 'about as the surface changes' is incorrect; 'how changes in the surface' is clearer. 'Impacts the license of the person' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'impacts a person's life'. Prepositions and word choice need correction for clarity.

× And with the geography only we get to know about the global warming and the various effects of that greenhouse effect.

✓ And only through geography do we get to know about global warming and the various effects of the greenhouse effect.

The phrase 'with the geography only' is awkward; 'only through geography' is better. 'That greenhouse effect' should be 'the greenhouse effect' as it is a known phenomenon. Pronoun and article usage need correction.

× Yes, geography was a subject in our high school.

✓ Yes, geography was a subject in our high school.

This sentence is correct as it refers to a past fact; no correction needed.

× So I learned geography since childhood and I was very much deviated towards this subject because of the curiosity and the variation in the various landforms such as the land, hills, mountains, slopes, plateaus and plains.

✓ So I have learned geography since childhood and I have been very interested in this subject because of my curiosity and the variety of landforms such as hills, mountains, slopes, plateaus, and plains.

'Learned geography since childhood' requires present perfect tense 'have learned' to indicate an action continuing to present. 'Was very much deviated towards' is incorrect; 'have been very interested in' is appropriate. 'Variation in the various landforms' is redundant; 'variety of landforms' is better. 'Land' is vague and unnecessary here.

× No, I really don't want to be a geography teacher because I found geography a very stubborn project and I was not very good into it.

✓ No, I really don't want to be a geography teacher because I found geography a very difficult subject and I was not very good at it.

'Stubborn project' is incorrect; 'difficult subject' is appropriate. 'Not very good into it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'not very good at it'. Adjective and preposition usage need correction.

× Maybe I was curious to know about the various topographic features of the surface of Earth, but I found that subject very hard to learn.

✓ Maybe I was curious to know about the various topographic features of the surface of the Earth, but I found that subject very hard to learn.

The sentence is mostly correct; only 'surface of Earth' needs the definite article 'the' before 'Earth' as it is a proper noun requiring it in this context.

× No, actually I won't be able to learn the geography of other countries because I'm a physiotherapist but profession and it is my full time job so I have a busy working schedule so I don't have free spare time to learn about the other countries at this moment of time.

✓ No, actually I won't be able to learn the geography of other countries because I'm a physiotherapist by profession and it is my full-time job, so I have a busy working schedule and don't have free time to learn about other countries at this moment.

'But profession' is incorrect; 'by profession' is correct. 'Full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as an adjective. 'Free spare time' is redundant; 'free time' suffices. 'At this moment of time' is wordy; 'at this moment' is better. Sentence structure and word choice need correction.