Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Also, focus on giving a clear topic sentence followed by a reason, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't like geography because I found it difficult to understand in high school, and I received low scores, which made me lose interest in the subject.

提案: Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and provide a more specific example to support your opinion.

例: I think geography is useful because we rely on tools like Google Maps to find locations, so knowing how to read maps is important in daily life.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and filler words. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details, using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I studied geography in high school and did very well, especially in exams, which earned me rewards from my teacher.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your reasons smoothly and avoid repeating the same phrases.

例: No, I don't want to be a geography teacher because I find the subject difficult to understand, and I believe I wouldn't enjoy teaching it to students.

提案: Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clearer explanation with specific examples.

例: Yes, I will learn more about the geography of other countries because it helps me navigate and visit interesting places when I travel abroad.

× I got bad score in geography.

✓ I got a bad score in geography.

The noun 'score' is countable and singular here, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× we use a Google map every time we want to find, uh, the location.

✓ we use Google Maps every time we want to find, uh, the location.

'Google Maps' is a proper noun and the name of the application, so it should be capitalized and used without the article 'a'.

× I have learned geography when I was in Senior High School.

✓ I learned geography when I was in Senior High School.

The phrase 'have learned' is present perfect tense, which is not appropriate with a specific past time 'when I was in Senior High School'. Simple past tense 'learned' should be used instead.

× As far I remember at the time, I passed within flying colors.

✓ As far as I remember at the time, I passed with flying colors.

The correct phrase is 'as far as I remember' and 'pass with flying colors' meaning to pass very well. 'Within' is incorrect here.

× my my, my teacher gave me some gifts to me as a reward.

✓ My teacher gave me some gifts as a reward.

The repetition 'my my, my' is unnecessary and 'gave me some gifts to me' is redundant. The correct form is 'gave me some gifts as a reward'.

× especially in exam geography.

✓ especially in the geography exam.

The noun phrase should be 'the geography exam' with the definite article 'the' and the adjective 'geography' before 'exam'.

× if I know about the geography, especially in country that I visit, it can help me to, uh, visit some place that I really want to play, uh, that I really want to visit.

✓ if I know about the geography, especially in the country that I visit, it can help me to, uh, visit some places that I really want to visit.

The phrase needs the definite article 'the' before 'country'. Also, 'some place' should be plural 'some places' to match the context. The phrase 'want to play' is incorrect here and should be omitted.