Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, say 'I find geography difficult because there are many cities to remember, which makes it challenging for me.'

例: I find geography difficult because there are many cities to remember, which makes it challenging for me to keep track of all the information.

提案: Avoid contradicting statements and improve coherence. Start with your opinion clearly, then explain with relevant reasons using linking words. For example, 'I think geography is useful because GPS technology helps us navigate easily.'

例: I think geography is useful because GPS technology helps us navigate easily and understand different locations better.

提案: Use correct tense and more natural expressions. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with details. For example, 'Yes, I learned geography at school, but I did not enjoy it because it was difficult for me.'

例: Yes, I learned geography at school, but I did not enjoy it because it was difficult for me to remember all the information.

提案: Use consistent tense and avoid filler words. Give a clear reason and link your ideas logically. For example, 'No, I do not want to be a geography teacher because it is difficult, and I have other career goals.'

例: No, I do not want to be a geography teacher because it is difficult, and I have other career goals that I want to pursue.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to explain your opinion. For example, 'If I get a chance, I would like to learn a little about other countries' geography, although I find it difficult because many places have similar names.'

例: If I get a chance, I would like to learn a little about other countries' geography, although I find it difficult because many places have similar names.

× I don't like geography because I'm find it very difficult and in fact there are so many, uh, cities to remember it.

✓ I don't like geography because I find it very difficult and in fact there are so many, uh, cities to remember.

The phrase 'I'm find' is incorrect because 'find' should not be used with 'am' in this context. The verb 'find' is a simple present tense verb here, so it should be 'I find' instead of 'I'm find'. Also, 'to remember it' is redundant; 'to remember' suffices.

× Geography is important in contemporary day because everybody has their own phone and informed there is a GPS which helps them to lo locate where they go to.

✓ Geography is important nowadays because everybody has their own phone and is informed that there is a GPS which helps them locate where they go.

The phrase 'in contemporary day' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'nowadays' or 'in contemporary times'. Also, 'informed there is a GPS' lacks a preposition or conjunction; it should be 'is informed that there is a GPS'. The phrase 'helps them to lo locate' contains a typo and unnecessary 'to'; it should be 'helps them locate'. The phrase 'where they go to' is redundant; 'where they go' is sufficient.

× Yes, in school days they give some knowledge about geography, but I find it is not my cup of tea.

✓ Yes, in school days they gave some knowledge about geography, but I find it is not my cup of tea.

The verb 'give' should be in the past tense 'gave' because the action happened in the past ('in school days').

× No, I did not want to be a geography teacher because I find it uh, difficult to become a geography teacher and I have a different kind of goals to become in career.

✓ No, I do not want to be a geography teacher because I find it, uh, difficult to become a geography teacher and I have different kinds of goals for my career.

The phrase 'did not want' is past tense, but the context suggests a present desire, so it should be 'do not want'. Also, 'a different kind of goals' is incorrect; it should be 'different kinds of goals' to match plural 'goals'. The phrase 'to become in career' is awkward; 'for my career' is correct.

× If I get a chance to learn about geography of other country I learn little bit because I find it very difficult and also they have a similar kind of names.

✓ If I get a chance to learn about the geography of other countries, I will learn a little bit because I find it very difficult and also they have similar kinds of names.

The phrase 'geography of other country' should be 'the geography of other countries' to be grammatically correct and plural. The verb 'I learn' in this conditional sentence should be future tense 'I will learn'. 'Little bit' should be 'a little bit'. 'A similar kind of names' should be 'similar kinds of names' to agree in number.