Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid unnecessary details. For example, say "I really enjoyed geography when I was in eighth grade because it helped me understand the world better."

例: I really enjoyed geography when I was in eighth grade because it helped me understand the world better.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and has some grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more concise. For example, "Yes, geography is useful because it helps students learn about the world, including maps and different cultures."

例: Yes, geography is useful because it helps students learn about the world, including maps and different cultures.

提案: Your answer has repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with details using linking words. For example, "Yes, I started learning geography in 7th grade because it was my favourite subject, and I was eager to learn more about it."

例: Yes, I started learning geography in 7th grade because it was my favourite subject, and I was eager to learn more about it.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid using 'whereas' incorrectly. For example, "Yes, I dream of becoming a geography teacher because it is my favourite subject."

例: Yes, I dream of becoming a geography teacher because it is my favourite subject.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Try to express your interest clearly and use linking words. For example, "Yes, I want to learn about the geography of other countries because I am interested in maps and cultures."

例: Yes, I want to learn about the geography of other countries because I am interested in maps and cultures.

× I remember that when I was in an eighth grade that time and geography was my favorite subject.

✓ I remember that when I was in eighth grade, geography was my favorite subject.

The phrase 'in an eighth grade that time' is awkward and incorrect. 'Eighth grade' is a school year and does not need an article 'an'. Also, 'that time' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow. Removing 'an' and 'that time' and adding a comma improves clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I think that geography is a very helpful for a student as well As for a people to enhance their knowledge about the globe and also about the map and the various cultural traditional places.

✓ Yes, I think that geography is very helpful for students as well as for people to enhance their knowledge about the globe, maps, and various cultural and traditional places.

The phrase 'a very helpful' is incorrect because 'helpful' is an adjective and does not take an article 'a'. Also, 'a people' is incorrect; 'people' is plural and does not need an article. 'As for a people' should be 'as for people'. Additionally, 'map' should be plural 'maps' to match 'various cultural traditional places'. Adding commas and correcting conjunctions improves clarity.

× Yes, when I was in the 7th grade, at that time I learned geography because in in this time this is my favorite subject.

✓ Yes, when I was in 7th grade, I learned geography because at that time it was my favorite subject.

The phrase 'in in this time this is my favorite subject' is incorrect and redundant. 'In in' is a repetition error. 'This is' should be past tense 'it was' to match the past context. 'At that time' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate past time. Removing redundancy and correcting tense improves the sentence.

× I always willing to learn more about geography.

✓ I am always willing to learn more about geography.

The sentence lacks the verb 'am' to link the subject 'I' and the adjective 'willing'. Without 'am', the sentence is incomplete. Adding 'am' corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, it is my dream to become a teacher whereas geography is my favorite subject.

✓ Yes, it is my dream to become a teacher because geography is my favorite subject.

The conjunction 'whereas' is used to contrast two ideas, but here the sentence shows cause and effect. 'Because' is the correct conjunction to express reason. Replacing 'whereas' with 'because' corrects the sentence meaning.

× Yes, I always want to learn about the geography of the other country because it is because I am an interested in geography.

✓ Yes, I always want to learn about the geography of other countries because I am interested in geography.

'The other country' is incorrect when referring generally; 'other countries' is appropriate. The phrase 'it is because I am an interested' is incorrect; 'an' should be removed and 'interested' is an adjective, so 'I am interested' is correct. Removing redundancy and correcting article use improves the sentence.

× So that's why I want to learn the map and the call connected voice.

✓ So that's why I want to learn about maps and related cultural aspects.

The phrase 'the map and the call connected voice' is unclear and likely a misphrasing. 'Learn the map' should be 'learn about maps'. 'Call connected voice' is unclear; likely intended to mean 'cultural connections' or 'related cultural aspects'. Rephrasing for clarity and correctness is necessary.