Geography— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1-2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix basic grammar (e.g., "one of my favourite aspects of geography is landscapes"). Keep to 3–4 sentences and use relevant vocabulary like "scenery", "photography", "natural environment".

例: I really enjoy the geography of landscapes. For example, I love photographing mountains and coastlines, so most of my camera gallery is full of landscape photos. Because of this, I enjoy learning about natural environments and how they shape local life.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion first (Yes/No/It depends) and then support with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "for example", "however"). Use correct terms (avoid "unbought", "blue color"). Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

例: It depends on the job. For example, people in agriculture or logistics need geography to understand climate and transport routes, while many office-based jobs may use it less. However, basic geographic knowledge can still be useful for understanding markets and resources.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer time expressions. Mention where and what you learned with one or two specific examples. Use linking words like "for example" and correct phrase forms (e.g., "in 9th and 10th grade"). Avoid vague phrases such as "I think" when you can be certain.

例: Yes, I studied geography in 9th and 10th grade as part of social studies. For example, we learned about national geography like rivers and mountains, and also about other countries' landscapes and climates.

提案: Give a direct, grammatical response (e.g., "No, I wouldn't like to be a geography teacher") and then provide 1-2 clear reasons using linking words ("because", "however"). Avoid unclear phrases like "tease my kids" and incorrect word choices. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: No, I wouldn't like to be a geography teacher because my interests are in business. However, I would teach basic geography informally to my children or cousins if they asked.

提案: Give a clear yes/no and then provide specific recent examples with correct names and grammar. Use linking words ("for example", "recently") and avoid vague or incorrect claims ("secretive area resolved by the government") unless you can explain clearly. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. For example, recently I learned about the pyramids in Mexico and the Grand Canyon while listening to a podcast. I found the geological formation of the Grand Canyon especially fascinating.

× I think one of the my preferential geography places the landscape.

✓ I think one of my preferred geographic places is landscape scenery.

The speaker used incorrect pronouns and word forms: 'one of the my' is redundant and wrong; use 'one of my'. 'Preferential' is the wrong adjective; use 'preferred'. 'Geography places the landscape' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'preferred geographic places' or 'landscape scenery'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct possessive pronoun and adjective forms.

× I like to have landscape.

✓ I like landscapes.

The verb phrase 'like to have landscape' is unnatural and ungrammatical. Use the verb 'like' with the noun 'landscapes' or the gerund 'seeing landscapes'. Suggestion: say 'I like landscapes' or 'I like seeing landscapes.'

× Most of my cameras gallery has been filled with the landscape pictures and the video regarding the cinematography because I'm quite fond of landscape views and the environment which is creates for me is quite genuine.

✓ Most of my camera's gallery is filled with landscape pictures and videos related to cinematography because I'm quite fond of landscape views and the atmosphere they create for me.

Multiple errors: 'cameras gallery' needs possessive 'camera's' or 'camera gallery'; use singular 'is filled' for the gallery (subject-verb agreement). 'the landscape pictures and the video' -> plural 'videos'. 'regarding the cinematography' is awkward; use 'related to cinematography'. 'the environment which is creates for me' has incorrect relative clause and verb form; use 'the atmosphere they create for me'. Suggestions: fix possessive, subject-verb agreement, plural forms, and relative clause.

× It depends upon the person's qualifications or the criteria for the where they work.

✓ It depends on a person's qualifications or the criteria of where they work.

Use 'depends on' rather than 'depends upon' (though 'upon' is possible, 'on' is more natural here). 'the criteria for the where they work' is ungrammatical; use 'criteria of where they work' or better 'the criteria of their workplace'. Suggestion: simplify to 'depends on a person's qualifications or the requirements of their workplace.'

× For example, if the person is more into the business area, they might also need the geography because according to the area they need to produce those products.

✓ For example, if a person works in business, they might also need geography because, depending on the area, they need to produce those products.

'more into the business area' is informal and unclear; use 'works in business'. 'need the geography' should be 'need geography' (no article). 'according to the area' should be 'depending on the area'. Suggestion: use 'works in business' and 'need geography' with clearer linking phrase.

× Unbought for any blue color white collar people is not a necessary means to know the geography.

✓ For many blue-collar or white-collar workers, knowing geography is not necessary.

The sentence uses wrong words: 'Unbought' is incorrect (probably meant 'untrue' or 'not necessary'); 'blue color white collar people' is an incorrect phrase—use 'blue-collar or white-collar workers'. 'is not a necessary means to know the geography' is wordy and awkward; say 'knowing geography is not necessary'. Suggestion: use correct occupational terms and simplify the clause.

× Yes, I have learned about the geography in my 10th standard and even in the ninth standard, I think because during this time we have to study about the socialist studies.

✓ Yes, I learned about geography in ninth and tenth grade because at that time we had to study social studies.

Mix of present perfect 'have learned' and past context; use simple past 'learned' for completed schooling. '10th standard' and 'ninth standard' are better phrased as 'tenth grade' and 'ninth grade'. 'we have to study about the socialist studies' is incorrect: use 'we had to study social studies' (no 'about' and correct noun 'social studies'). Suggestion: use past tense and standard educational terms.

× And in the socialist studies there are lots of geography, not just about our nationality, but also about the international places.

✓ In social studies there was a lot of geography content, not just about our country but also about international places.

'lots of geography' is informal and 'geography' as an uncountable noun needs 'a lot of geography content' or 'many geography topics'. 'our nationality' is wrong in this context; use 'our country'. Tense should match past: 'there was'. Suggestion: say 'there was a lot of geography content' or 'many topics in geography.'

× So yeah, that's the time I learn about geography.

✓ So yeah, that's when I learned about geography.

Mismatch of 'that's the time' (past reference) with present tense 'learn'. Use past tense 'learned' and 'when' is more natural than 'the time'. Suggestion: use 'when' and past tense for past events.

× No, I don't like to be the kind of teacher who is quite into the geography.

✓ No, I don't want to be the kind of teacher who is really into geography.

'like to be the kind of teacher' is acceptable but 'don't want to be' is more natural. 'quite into the geography' uses unnecessary definite article and awkward adverb; use 'really into geography'. Suggestion: remove 'the' before 'geography' and use natural adverb 'really'.

× Yeah, I know it is quite of interesting, enthusiastic for the people to learn about different places, different areas, what are their records, skills and how it is measured.

✓ Yeah, I know it is quite interesting and exciting for people to learn about different places and regions, their characteristics, and how these are measured.

Errors: 'quite of interesting' is wrong; use 'quite interesting'. 'enthusiastic for the people' should be 'exciting for people'. 'different areas, what are their records, skills' is unclear—replace with 'their characteristics'. 'how it is measured' -> 'how these are measured' to match plural noun. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and clearer nouns.

× But it's not my kind of thing. I'm more into the business. But if I have to tease my kids or my cousins, it will be.

✓ But it's not my kind of thing. I'm more into business. If I have to teach my kids or cousins about it, I would.

'tease' is the wrong verb—should be 'teach'. 'it will be' is vague; use conditional 'I would' or 'I would teach them'. Suggestion: choose the correct verb and use conditional form for hypothetical situations.

× Yes, I have been learning about the different geographies in different countries.

✓ Yes, I have been learning about the geographies of different countries.

Awkward repetition 'different geographies in different countries'—better 'geographies of different countries'. Present perfect continuous 'have been learning' is acceptable if ongoing; keep it if learning continues. Suggestion: rephrase for conciseness.

× For example, I recently I learned about the Mexico Pyramid, the Grand Canyon.

✓ For example, recently I learned about the Mexican pyramids and the Grand Canyon.

Redundant 'I recently I learned'—remove extra 'I'. 'Mexico Pyramid' should be 'Mexican pyramids' (more natural) or 'the Pyramid of the Sun' if specific. Use past tense 'learned' for a recent completed action. Suggestion: remove duplication and use correct adjective 'Mexican'.

× And so during my visit to the Zorro podcast, I learned about the Grand Canyon who there are some kind of secretive area which has been resolved by the government.

✓ During my visit to the Zorro podcast, I learned about the Grand Canyon, where there are some secret areas that have been investigated by the government.

Errors: 'who' should be 'where' when referring to a place. 'some kind of secretive area' is awkward—use 'some secret areas'. 'which has been resolved by the government' is unclear; likely 'investigated' or 'secured'. Use plural agreement 'areas that have been investigated'. Suggestion: use 'where' for places, choose precise verbs like 'investigated' or 'secured', and ensure subject-verb agreement.