Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, for example, avoid repeating 'flowers' unnecessarily and correct grammar such as 'made made' and 'there is any person who don't like'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are beautiful and colourful. Seeing them always lifts my mood and brings me joy. I believe almost everyone appreciates flowers.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some awkward phrasing and grammatical mistakes. Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, my whole family loves flowers. For instance, my daughter prefers pink roses, while my son likes lotuses and lilies. So, I definitely know many people who appreciate flowers.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid awkward phrases like 'I do can't do that'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: No, there are not many flowers where I live because Delhi is a very crowded city with limited green spaces. I try to grow flowers on my balcony, but due to lack of time, I am unable to do so. However, I often buy flowers when I visit temples.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains filler words and some grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and avoid unnecessary pauses or fillers like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, sometimes I take photos of flowers at my office, which has a nice green area with many plants. For example, in February, many flowers bloom there, and I enjoy capturing their beauty in pictures, sometimes including myself in the photos.

提案: Your answer covers the topic but has some incomplete sentences and filler words. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid fillers like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific examples.

例: Yes, in my country, it is common to send flowers on occasions such as weddings, anniversaries, and birthdays. We also offer flowers at temples as a sign of respect. Additionally, on Valentine's Day, people often buy flowers to express their feelings.

× While seeing flowers it made made my mood in it give joy and I don't think there is any person who don't like the flowers.

✓ While seeing flowers, it made my mood joyful and I don't think there is any person who doesn't like flowers.

The phrase 'made made' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'made'. The phrase 'in it give joy' is incorrect; it should be 'made my mood joyful' to express the feeling properly. Also, 'who don't like the flowers' should be 'who doesn't like flowers' to agree with the singular 'any person' and to remove the unnecessary definite article before 'flowers'.

× Some like someone like pink, pink roses or someone like Lotus or lilies.

✓ Some like pink, pink roses, or some like lotus or lilies.

The phrase 'some like someone like' is incorrect and redundant. It should be simplified to 'some like' to correctly express preferences. Also, 'Lotus' should be lowercase unless referring to a proper noun, so 'lotus' is appropriate here.

× Yes, my family, my daughter, my son, my husband, all of them love the flowers.

✓ Yes, my family, my daughter, my son, my husband, all of them love flowers.

The definite article 'the' before 'flowers' is unnecessary when speaking generally about flowers. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× No I can't see so many flowers in my area where I live because I live in Delhi and the Delhi is very crowded place and there is no space of flowers or gardens something like that.

✓ No, I can't see so many flowers in my area where I live because I live in Delhi and Delhi is a very crowded place and there is no space for flowers or gardens or something like that.

The definite article 'the' before 'Delhi' is incorrect because 'Delhi' is a proper noun and does not require 'the'. Also, 'no space of flowers' should be 'no space for flowers' to use the correct preposition.

× I try to grow flowers in my balcony but definitely due to time shortage I do can't do that.

✓ I try to grow flowers on my balcony but definitely due to lack of time, I can't do that.

The phrase 'I do can't do that' is incorrect; 'do' should be removed as 'can't' already expresses negation. Also, 'in my balcony' should be 'on my balcony' because 'on' is the correct preposition for balconies. 'Time shortage' is better expressed as 'lack of time'.

× But when I go to temple I purchase flower.

✓ But when I go to the temple, I purchase flowers.

The phrase 'go to temple' requires the definite article 'the' before 'temple'. Also, 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the context of purchasing multiple flowers.

× Yes, sometimes I do like in my office there is very good green area and lot of flowers, plants of flowers.

✓ Yes, sometimes I do. In my office, there is a very good green area and lots of flowers and plants.

The sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'Lot of flowers' should be 'lots of flowers' or 'a lot of flowers'. 'Plants of flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'plants'. Also, 'very good green area' needs the article 'a' before it.

× So whenever I see beautiful flowers like in the month of February, a lot of flowers uh grow in my uh office.

✓ So whenever I see beautiful flowers, like in the month of February, a lot of flowers grow in my office.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs commas for clarity. The filler 'uh' should be removed for formal correctness.

× And uh, when we visit temples, we offer flowers to God as well.

✓ And when we visit temples, we offer flowers to God as well.

The filler 'uh' should be removed for clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× And on various occasions like Valentine Day, uh, we purchase flower and.

✓ And on various occasions like Valentine's Day, we purchase flowers.

'Valentine Day' should be 'Valentine's Day' with the possessive form. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the context. The sentence is incomplete and should end properly.