Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and slight redundancy. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they brighten my day. For instance, when I feel down, I like to visit a park to see various plants, which helps improve my mood.

提案: Your answer covers the question but lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Avoid vague phrases like 'and the like' and ensure subject-verb agreement. Use linking words to organise your ideas better.

例: Yes, many people I know love flowers, including my husband and family. For example, my mother and I plant many flowers such as roses in our large garden in northern Iran.

提案: Your answer is relevant and informative but could be improved by avoiding repetition and using more varied vocabulary. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Unfortunately, my city is in the desert region of central Iran, so there aren't many flowers around. However, most people grow flowers at home since there are few parks with abundant flowers.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some awkward phrases and grammatical errors. Avoid repeating 'I like' and use more natural expressions. Also, be careful with word choice and article usage.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos to capture beautiful moments and scenery. Looking at these pictures lifts my spirits and creates a pleasant atmosphere for me.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your sentences more clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, people in my country often give flowers as gifts, especially when visiting friends' homes. It is a common way to show appreciation and respect.

× When I feel down and I feel blue, I prefer to go to a park and see lots of plants because it's improves my mood.

✓ When I feel down and I feel blue, I prefer to go to a park and see lots of plants because it improves my mood.

The phrase 'it's improves' is incorrect because 'it' is a subject pronoun and 'improves' is a verb in the third person singular form. The auxiliary verb 'is' ('it's') should not be used here. The correct form is 'it improves' to indicate that seeing plants improves the mood.

× most of my friends, families, my husband and the like, like flowers and we have a big garden in northern cities of Iran and my mother and I plants lots of flower in these gardens like roses and the like.

✓ most of my friends, family, my husband and the like, like flowers and we have a big garden in northern cities of Iran and my mother and I plant lots of flowers in these gardens like roses and the like.

The word 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's relatives collectively. Also, 'plants' should be 'plant' because the subject 'my mother and I' is plural. Additionally, 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match 'lots of' which requires a plural noun.

× we have a big garden in northern cities of Iran

✓ we have a big garden in the northern cities of Iran

The phrase 'in northern cities of Iran' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'northern cities' because it refers to a specific region. The correct phrase is 'in the northern cities of Iran'.

× we don't have lots of flowers.

✓ we don't have many flowers.

The phrase 'lots of' is informal and acceptable, but in formal speech 'many' is preferred with countable plural nouns like 'flowers'. However, 'lots of' is not grammatically incorrect here, so this is a stylistic suggestion rather than a strict grammar correction.

× we prefer to buy flowers as a gift especially when we want to hang out with our friends and they invited us to their home and they prefer by flowers for them as a gift.

✓ we prefer to buy flowers as a gift especially when we want to hang out with our friends and they invite us to their home and they prefer to buy flowers for them as a gift.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the infinitive form 'to buy' not 'by'. Also, 'they invited' should be 'they invite' to maintain present tense consistency. The preposition 'for' is correct when indicating the recipient of the flowers.