Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'I love flowers' twice, say it once and then explain why. Also, use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid awkward phrases like 'so sober'.

例: Yes, I love many kinds of flowers. My favorite is the rose because it looks elegant and gentle. However, I also enjoy other flowers for their unique colors and scents.

提案: Focus on subject-verb agreement and pronoun consistency. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'many people' without examples. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I have a close friend who loves flowers very much. Whenever he sees a beautiful flower, he buys it for himself because it makes him happy.

提案: Improve grammar, especially plural forms and sentence clarity. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas. Be more specific about the types of flowers or reasons for limited variety.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live; however, there is not much variety because the climate and farming opportunities limit the cultivation of different kinds of flowers.

提案: Correct vocabulary errors like 'drink a bottles of flowers' which is incorrect. Use proper sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I really enjoy capturing their beauty. Whenever I see a beautiful flower, I like to take a picture of it to remember the moment.

提案: Use correct prepositions and plural forms. Avoid vague phrases like 'good time or good moment' and be more specific. Use linking words to organize ideas clearly.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions such as birthdays or celebrations. They usually give flowers to their loved ones to express their feelings.

× Like rose is my most favorite flowers because it's so sober and so decent and gentle.

✓ Like rose is my most favorite flower because it's so sober and so decent and gentle.

The word 'flowers' should be singular 'flower' because 'rose' refers to a single type of flower here. Using plural 'flowers' is incorrect in this context.

× Whenever he see a flower, they buy it for himself.

✓ Whenever he sees a flower, he buys it for himself.

The subject 'he' requires the verb to be in third person singular form 'sees' and 'buys'. Also, pronouns should be consistent; 'he' should be used instead of 'they'.

× Whenever he see a flower, they buy it for himself.

✓ Whenever he sees a flower, he buys it for himself.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect here; it should be 'he' to match the singular subject. Also, verb forms should agree with singular subject.

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, but there are not enough variation of flowers because in this country there have not enough opportunity to cultivate the different kind of flowers.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers where I live, but there is not enough variation of flowers because in this country there is not enough opportunity to cultivate different kinds of flowers.

'Variation' is singular, so 'is' should be used instead of 'are'. Also, 'there have' is incorrect; it should be 'there is'. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'different'.

× Yes, I drink a bottles of flowers in my daily life and I also love to take photos of flowers because I really enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I take photos of flowers in my daily life and I also love to take photos of flowers because I really enjoy it.

The phrase 'drink a bottles of flowers' is incorrect and does not make sense. It should be 'take photos of flowers'. 'Bottles' is plural and does not fit the context.

× Whenever I see a nice flowers I love it and enjoy it to take a photo of them.

✓ Whenever I see nice flowers, I love them and enjoy taking photos of them.

'Flowers' is plural, so pronouns should be plural 'them' instead of 'it'. Also, 'enjoy it to take a photo' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy taking photos'.

× Yes, people in my country send flowers to others in mostly well occasions, or it's their birthday or it's a good time or good moment.

✓ Yes, people in my country send flowers to others mostly on special occasions, like birthdays or other good times.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'on' should be used with 'occasions'. Also, 'well occasions' is incorrect; 'special occasions' is appropriate.

× That's why they send a flowers to their favorite person.

✓ That's why they send flowers to their favorite person.

The article 'a' should not be used before the plural noun 'flowers'. It should be simply 'send flowers'.