Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ve anlamlı, ancak tekrar eden kelimelerden kaçınmalısınız ve cümle yapısını daha akıcı hale getirmelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümle sayısını 5'ten fazla yapmaktan kaçının.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially tulips. Their elegant shape and vibrant colors are very appealing to me. Pink tulips, in particular, make me feel happy. I always admire their beauty whenever I see them.

提案: Cevabınızda netlik ve doğrudanlık eksik. Daha spesifik bir kişi veya grup belirtin ve cümlenizi daha mantıklı ve akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanın.

例: I don't have a specific person in mind, but I believe many of my friends love flowers, especially tulips, because they are legendary and admired for their beauty by everyone.

提案: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları var ve ifadeler biraz karışık. Daha net ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanarak cevabınızı geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: Unfortunately, there are not many flowers where I live. Although you can buy flowers in shops, I rarely see flowers growing naturally in my area.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı ifadeler doğal değil ve anlatımda tekrarlar var. Daha akıcı ve doğal ifadeler kullanarak cümlenizi sadeleştirin.

例: I often take photos of flowers and cats in my daily life. Whenever I see them, I quickly take out my phone and capture pictures from different angles.

提案: Cevabınız genel olarak iyi ancak son cümlenizde dilbilgisi hatası var ve ifadeler biraz karışık. Daha net ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanın.

例: In my country, flowers are quite expensive, so people don't send them often. However, some still buy flowers for loved ones on special occasions. Also, some businesses earn a lot by selling flowers despite the high prices.

× I can't help but admire their beauty whenever, when, whenever I see them.

✓ I can't help but admire their beauty whenever I see them.

The sentence contains redundant conjunctions 'whenever, when, whenever' which is incorrect. Only one conjunction 'whenever' is needed to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× Well, I don't have any specific person, but I think that my friends would love flowers as well as tulips too because tulips are legends and the beauty of tulips must be admiring from everyone.

✓ Well, I don't have any specific person, but I think that my friends would love flowers as well as tulips because tulips are legendary and the beauty of tulips must be admired by everyone.

The phrase 'tulips are legends' is incorrect; 'legendary' is the correct adjective. Also, 'must be admiring from everyone' is incorrect; the passive form 'must be admired by everyone' is correct. The pronoun use 'admiring from everyone' is incorrect and should be corrected to 'admired by everyone'.

× I can sadly point that there's no flowers where I live.

✓ I can sadly point out that there are no flowers where I live.

The phrase 'there's no flowers' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural, so 'there are' should be used instead of 'there is'. Also, 'point' should be 'point out' to be idiomatic.

× I can't see some flowers on the area of where I live.

✓ I can't see any flowers in the area where I live.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to an area; 'in' is the correct preposition. Also, 'some' is not appropriate in negative sentences; 'any' should be used.

× When I see a cat and flowers, I immediately take off my phone and up on the camera and take some photos in a various way that I can.

✓ When I see a cat and flowers, I immediately take out my phone, open the camera, and take some photos in various ways that I can.

The phrases 'take off my phone' and 'up on the camera' are incorrect. The correct expressions are 'take out my phone' and 'open the camera'. Also, 'in a various way' should be 'in various ways'.

× Additionally, come some business make a lot of money by selling flowers despite the high prices.

✓ Additionally, some businesses make a lot of money by selling flowers despite the high prices.

The phrase 'come some business' is incorrect and unnecessary. The correct sentence should start with 'some businesses'. Also, 'business' should be plural 'businesses' to agree with 'some'.