Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like flowers with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are beautiful and fragrant. Their colors and scents always cheer me up, so I enjoy having them around.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to sound more confident. Give a direct answer and add some supporting details with linking words. For example, mention a specific person or group who loves flowers and explain why.

例: Yes, many of my friends love flowers because they find them relaxing and beautiful. For instance, my sister often grows roses in her garden.

提案: Improve sentence structure and avoid unnecessary fillers. Use linking words to list examples clearly. Also, clarify your location to avoid confusion.

例: Yes, I live in Georgia, and there are many types of flowers here. For example, roses, chamomile, and lilies grow commonly in my area.

提案: Focus on clear pronunciation and correct word choice. Avoid filler words and organize your answer logically with linking words. Explain why you take photos of flowers with specific reasons.

例: Yes, sometimes I take photos of flowers because they make pictures more beautiful and colorful. I enjoy capturing their details in my photos.

提案: Speak more fluently without hesitation and use complete sentences. Provide specific details and use linking words to explain who usually receives flowers and why.

例: Yes, many people in my country send flowers as gifts, especially to women. Flowers are often given on special occasions like birthdays or celebrations.

× Yes I love flowers and does not matter what they will be I just I just appreciate their beauty.

✓ Yes, I love flowers and it does not matter what they are; I just appreciate their beauty.

The original sentence lacks the subject 'it' before 'does not matter', which is necessary for correct modal verb usage. Also, 'will be' is incorrect here because the statement refers to a general truth, so the present tense 'are' is appropriate.

× I think they are attractive because of their smell or visual sight so that's why I like it.

✓ I think they are attractive because of their smell or visual appearance, so that's why I like them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'flowers' which is plural; 'them' should be used instead. Also, 'visual sight' is not a correct phrase; 'visual appearance' is more appropriate.

× I think, umm, many people are such uh, type umm, but uh, I don't know uh, specifically who which will be.

✓ I think many people are that type, but I don't know specifically who they are.

The phrase 'who which will be' is incorrect and unclear. The correct pronoun 'they' should be used to refer to 'people', and the sentence should be simplified for clarity.

× Yes, Sir. I live in Georgia, specifically Korea and we have many uh, type of flowers, for example roses, chamomile or lilies and uh, so on uh, so. Here is many.

✓ Yes, Sir. I live in Georgia, specifically Korea, and we have many types of flowers, for example, roses, chamomile, lilies, and so on. There are many here.

'Type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'many'. Also, 'Here is many' is incorrect; the correct form is 'There are many' to indicate existence of plural nouns.

× Yes, wine and sometimes I, uh, I take portos uh, with flowers because I'm like so much uh, it makes portals more attractive uh visual sight.

✓ Yes, when I have time, sometimes I take photos of flowers because I like them so much; it makes the photos more visually attractive.

'Wine' is likely a mishearing of 'when I'. 'Portos' should be 'photos'. The preposition 'with' is incorrect; 'of' is used with 'photos'. 'Visual sight' is incorrect; 'visually attractive' is appropriate.

× So that's why I take photos with.

✓ So that's why I take photos of them.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'with' which is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'of' and the pronoun 'them' refers to flowers.

× Uh, yes, uh, many people, uh, you send uh, this, uh, gift to each other, but mostly mean, umm uh, sent flowers to women.

✓ Uh, yes, many people send this gift to each other, but mostly, I mean, they send flowers to women.

The modal verb 'you send' is incorrectly used; it should be 'many people send'. Also, 'sent' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'send'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.